| Re: Heat by Shardik |
Doug 205.188.116.140 |
11-Jun-04/6:27 PM |
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I was asleep by the third line!Very lame.
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| Re: Poet by Shardik |
Doug 205.188.116.140 |
11-Jun-04/6:22 PM |
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A sad little poem about a sad little boy,still afraid to grow up,still afraid to love a woman after 23 years,so sad.Almost made me cry.
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INTRANSIT 69.88.208.165 |
11-Jun-04/6:32 PM |
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In the house, even. *urk*
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| Re: It was... by Shardik |
Doug 205.188.116.140 |
11-Jun-04/6:48 PM |
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Wow,I thought you could'nt be worse-proved me wrong again!
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| Re: The Ocean Prefers A Sunset by wilco |
Doug 205.188.116.140 |
11-Jun-04/6:55 PM |
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Godswife why are you so bitter? you really need to get a life outside of lame internet sites...really!
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horus8 24.130.62.63 |
11-Jun-04/7:05 PM |
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| Re: A Strenuous Recollection by Doug |
horus8 24.130.62.63 |
11-Jun-04/7:06 PM |
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Change "hope" to Pope, and then I believe you'll still have fleck, but it will be HOLY fleck.
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| Re: a person by francis nor capule |
horus8 24.130.62.63 |
11-Jun-04/7:20 PM |
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A Parson's Nose By Sir Nudely Of Niggerly
Past your nose you will spot,
a parson that is for you to cot...
and felch for the viewing of the Abbot.
A parson who's always there, never busy,with a pear.
"who will put you on a pedestal;"
The right place for you to be lubed
and twhen tyou're twogwether,
the tworld twould twop,
Uranus shall pull;
and retrograde
and the parson would then palm-aid
both of your nose.
though far apart thy cheeks
Norwegian wood, should arise...
that parson would keep you in their heart,
with his nose betwixt your thighs
querries would be answered,
stains queerly erased.
and from the parson's love stuff floweth,
like mountain fresh springs, and HOT GAY SEX.
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Doug 205.188.116.140 |
11-Jun-04/7:28 PM |
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| Re: The Gray Idea by Doug |
god'swife 4.232.108.217 |
11-Jun-04/7:38 PM |
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wow, this is amazing!!!
'Struggling...strangled by hands of chance(and clocks)'
You're so insightful, you know, you really have your thumb on the pulse of life.
I especially like the way you capitalized Fate and Time, really drives the message home.
Welcome to poemranker! :)
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| Re: The Pear Blossom Highway by Shardik |
Doug 64.136.27.228 |
11-Jun-04/3:03 PM |
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smack dab in the middle-wow you are brilliant!
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Doug 64.136.27.228 |
11-Jun-04/3:07 PM |
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You sure know your flowers!
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| Re: The Gray Idea by Doug |
Shardik 24.130.62.63 |
11-Jun-04/3:32 PM |
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A shitaco with extra snips of shredded ass.
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wilco 24.176.102.131 |
11-Jun-04/4:11 PM |
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Waiting to hear of a loved ones death? or a birth?
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| Re: The Ocean Prefers A Sunset by wilco |
Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
11-Jun-04/4:47 PM |
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nice word caryatids.
I like this - I think it would be better for the killing of some of the small words (the conjuctions and little preps - but I often say this).
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Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
11-Jun-04/4:50 PM |
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I like haggard/swaggered and the pun with drug and undertow.
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| Re: fire has its own logic by impert&ent |
Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
11-Jun-04/4:53 PM |
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"interiority of computers" - interesting.
Some fresh ideas here, but the form is hurting it imho; got me thinking on it.
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Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
11-Jun-04/4:56 PM |
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The nuance of the spanish is lost on me, but I do like the sentiment (and I know you've spent a fair amount of time tweeking it - no, that's not a euphamism :).
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| Re: The Gray Idea by Doug |
Shardik 24.130.62.63 |
11-Jun-04/6:01 PM |
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I never contested my well fluffed homosexuality,
and if anything it adds more perfume to when I
state your work as being a crackling homerun of shit
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| Re: fire has its own logic by impert&ent |
Shardik 24.130.62.63 |
11-Jun-04/6:02 PM |
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