Re: a comment on "America The Beautiful" by jroday	jroday 204.215.34.194	16-Mar-05/4:18 PM
you're so damn right!
Re: "America The Beautiful" by jroday	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	16-Mar-05/3:00 PM
idealism is nice - but will it put bread on the tables of all these people u discuss?
Re: a comment on The Measurement by thepinkbunnyofdoom	edpeterson 68.79.58.40	16-Mar-05/2:53 PM
LOL. Yeah. I got that.
Re: Zin/Enough/Things/Squeeze/Flow by gregsamsa222	Rainbow_chaser 64.229.169.52	16-Mar-05/12:18 PM
WOW! I'm lacking anything to say, other then this poem is brilliant. So touching, so deep. utterly amazing, I disagree with the comments of it being to lengthly. Perfection is all i can think of. ****10**** ~Autumn
Re: JJ’s Church by Dovina	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.87.166	16-Mar-05/10:58 AM
What are you using as "substitutionary bread" in a bar? Pretzels? Other than that(My own silly curious nature), good comparison.
Re: a comment on The Measurement by thepinkbunnyofdoom	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.87.166	16-Mar-05/10:19 AM
Think pool, and a pool shark.
Re: Thinking by dancin_n_da_moonlite	Dan garcia-Black 66.218.59.216	16-Mar-05/8:22 AM
You are. Maybe that will be enough. If I were writing this one I would have screwed it up at the end with some trite comment about someone passing the joint or bottle over to me. Good thing you wrote it instead.
Re: Death is a Three Step Process by dancin_n_da_moonlite	Dan garcia-Black 66.218.59.216	16-Mar-05/8:19 AM
Good work on an easy form made difficult (and better}.
Re: The Glass by dancin_n_da_moonlite	Dan garcia-Black 66.218.59.216	16-Mar-05/8:16 AM
We all see the world through glass. I see it through the glass of a wine bottle. Sometimes I see the world through the glass of the Cathode Ray Tube. Glass is(at least)obvious where our own prejudices and cultural filters are not.
Re: JJ’s Church by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 66.218.59.216	16-Mar-05/8:10 AM
I'll never go to another steakhouse bar and feel secular again. JJ's Steakhouse Church is a holey (sic) place
Re: a comment on The Measurement by thepinkbunnyofdoom	Dovina 12.72.33.97	16-Mar-05/7:21 AM
So did she. You've been toyed with.
Re: a comment on A Plea To The Mother(Mother Earth) by Rainbow_chaser	Dovina 12.72.33.97	16-Mar-05/7:13 AM
You've described a lot of folks here, I think. There's strength in admitting weakness, but slaughter too. Just a warning about the wolves. As for your writing, it has poetntial, I think, but try going over it a few more times, sitting on it a a day or two before posting. There are some obvious errors in this and some repetitions that I could point out, but which you will find if you go over it a few more times. Hang in.
Re: a comment on Delusions Of A Peaceful Place by Stacy Stewart	Dovina 12.72.33.97	16-Mar-05/6:54 AM
A bad trip, a delusion, a hoped-for victory lost.
Re: a comment on JJ’s Church by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.33.97	16-Mar-05/6:31 AM
The waiters are more related to ushers, I think, than elders. I used the idea of transubstantiation in “sip the blood” but might try to work the word in too.
Re: a comment on JJ’s Church by Dovina	edpeterson 68.79.58.40	16-Mar-05/6:13 AM
what a loaf.
Re: The Measurement by thepinkbunnyofdoom	edpeterson 68.79.58.40	16-Mar-05/6:08 AM
Some sort of concrete imagery would not hurt this. I feel left out.
Re: Sleeping Beauty by fevriere	richa 81.178.245.63	16-Mar-05/3:12 AM
Cute. Except that two lines seem to have inexplicably become detached from both the first and second verses of this two verse poem.
Re: a comment on JJ’s Church by Dovina	richa 81.178.245.63	16-Mar-05/3:01 AM
The metaphor is too clumsy. If the setting is a bar make the setting a bar. Gently allude to the nature of a church, the wine, amen, comfort etc. There is no way in the world we can be expected to assume the elders are waiters. How about using a religious word like transubstantiation figuratively.
Re: a comment on JJ’s Church by Dovina	poodietat 68.51.106.137	16-Mar-05/12:13 AM
By the grace of god, I no longer visit churches _or_ bars. Thanks for the explanation. One of the better things about poemranker: it's interesting to get inside the mind of the poet. Of course, this is one of the worst parts of poemranker, as well: the mind of a poet can be an ugly place. The poem makes much more sense now. Thanks for clarifying.
Re: a comment on wishes by the_poetess	edpeterson 68.79.58.40	15-Mar-05/7:16 PM
"Last but not least could we get of this poor womans comment page, I'm sure no one wants to hear what you or myself has to say to eachother. " Interesting comment to write on "this poor woman's comment page." I suppose irony is a foreign concept. then you go on to apologize to those who have had to read all this crap, while posting MORE CRAP. Beautiful stuff.