Re: a comment on For Elizabeth, Wherever She May Be by wilco	wilco 24.165.207.93	20-Feb-05/8:51 AM
I can't ever tell if you're serious or not. If you are, thanks.
Re: ~RePOST~Cupid's Arrow <----<< by nothingtoanyone	Dovina 12.72.14.78	20-Feb-05/7:01 AM
We all know this is not a Shakespearian style poem. You used a few old English words for some reason, which zodiac picked-up on to ridicule you. It’s what he does – finds some insignificant aspect of your poem to bash, while ignoring the thrust of what you’re trying to communicate. If you are showing us cupid’s sting, as the title suggests, then the arrow has missed its mark, at least to my understanding. Start with getting the spelling and grammar so they say what you mean – “northern” “breathe a breath” “wherefore is the desire thou desirest” After fixing these, look at the things you are saying too many times. “wherefore is the desire thou desirest” could be simply “wherefore is the desire” and “breathe a breath, a breath of blood” could be “breathe a breath of blood.” Then look at your images and metaphors. Does “moss-ridden mule” say what you want to say? I think this has potential for a good poem.
Re: a comment on Rusty knife to the kidney by INTRANSIT	Dovina 12.72.14.78	20-Feb-05/6:33 AM
Suggestion: The poet seems to feel something and finds a unique way of letting me feel something too.
Re: For Elizabeth, Wherever She May Be by wilco	zodiac 212.118.14.17	20-Feb-05/5:35 AM
This is good.
Re: a comment on Rusty knife to the kidney by INTRANSIT	zodiac 212.118.14.17	20-Feb-05/5:26 AM
Suggestion: Because it's short, oddly indented, and has the smell of aphorism about it.
Re: a comment on If God Was a Nihilist by baughworm	zodiac 212.118.14.17	20-Feb-05/5:25 AM
Thanks! Maybe you mean He doesn't believe in GodGod.
Re: a comment on If God Was a Nihilist by baughworm	zodiac 212.118.14.17	20-Feb-05/5:24 AM
Hey, great sarcastic response! Too bad I said "about all your poetry" and not just "all your poetry, including your most recent". Seriously, do you only read like every fifth word or something? PS-Your ten times as mature as I am.
Re: a comment on ~RePOST~Cupid's Arrow <----<< by nothingtoanyone	zodiac 212.118.14.17	20-Feb-05/5:15 AM
Of course I only mean, in your, nothingtoanyone's, experience. Please feel free to complete the following instead: 1) I, nothingtoanyone, think old Shakespeary kinds of poems are _______________. 2) I, nothingtoanyone, have read ___ Shakespeary poems. HINT: The first blank should probably be an adjective or adjective phrase. The second should be a number.
Re: He tells me to imagine... by RION12	Blindpoetry 68.227.130.156	19-Feb-05/9:00 PM
Kind of blandish. I agree with Dovina on this. metaphors, similies, oxymorons, personification, ect. -they are your friends. ;)
Re: He tells me to imagine... by RION12	Dovina 12.72.12.72	19-Feb-05/8:22 PM
Said too plainly. Try for imaginative ways to say it.
Re: On the Lawn by bamf909	Dovina 12.72.12.72	19-Feb-05/8:17 PM
Poemranker has been down most of the afternoon and evening. That seems to happen quite often, and in your case explains the lack of initial commentary. Wow, walking out in bare feet on frozen grass just to kiss her. That's great and nicely written. "convalescence" seems strange, try "red and green fuse to one." Welcome aboard.
Re: a comment on ~RePOST~Cupid's Arrow <----<< by nothingtoanyone	nothingtoanyone 66.215.154.187	19-Feb-05/7:37 PM
I really dont know what you mean theres more then one way to complete the sentences and all so very different.........
Re: a comment on Step Up by Blindpoetry	RION12 64.136.26.226	19-Feb-05/4:18 PM
Oh so that is what it was about. Thanks for clearing that up for me. Well now that I know what it means and now that I read it again I think it's really cool. I rate a 8 now.
Re: Step Up by Blindpoetry	Blindpoetry 68.227.130.156	19-Feb-05/4:07 PM
I was a freakin' tard and wrote a huge reply while not logged in. ...And it didn't register or something. We've eliminated Anonymous comments? Crap. That bites. So I'll say in short: It's sort of random[ish] in the first stanza, but then i come to a point the rest of it. It's about how I am always openly opinionated with my friends, which turns into arguments and debates - which I love. And I encourage them to do so.. just..because.. It's fun for me. XD Nothing really deep. At first it was, but then i was like... Eff the deepness, let me be real.
Re: Step Up by Blindpoetry	RION12 64.136.26.226	19-Feb-05/3:22 PM
What are you trying to say? You most tell me. Email me and don't say any bad words in the email. It's my school email address and they don't let us say anything bad. That fucken sucks but i'm use to it.
Re: Topic of Death II by ARTIE	some deleted user 216.135.39.196	19-Feb-05/11:40 AM
Fuckin love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!! The Peekster
Re: a comment on The Man I Love by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.8.90	19-Feb-05/10:45 AM
As a substitute for sugar, I agree.
Re: a comment on If God Was a Nihilist by baughworm	Dovina 12.72.8.90	19-Feb-05/10:32 AM
Yeah, my most recent's a good example - looking at those patched holes in the wall and wondering what pictures hung from those nails, wondering if his unseen life affects mine, if God's at work, or if fate's at work, which come to think of it implies God, doesn't it? Notions to play with with no worries about how addeled they are. Someday I'll become as mature as you and free from addled notions.
Re: If God Was a Nihilist by baughworm	baughworm 24.223.169.10	19-Feb-05/10:24 AM
nihilist: someone who rejects all theories of morality or religious belief
Re: a comment on I AM NOT CONTAINED BY THIS UNIVERSE by Prince of Void	Dovina 12.72.8.90	19-Feb-05/10:21 AM
Oh, but you are! Go ahead, code it, redefine it, you are, as you say, captivated with words, and they by the universe.