| Re: Paris 1941-63 by Mister Cakes |
Crakyamuni 131.252.230.71 |
8-Feb-05/12:01 PM |
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I'm not sure about the reference to the time period, but I think socks have sentimental value for poets.
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| Re: a comment on An intolerable rash brother by Crakyamuni |
Crakyamuni 131.252.230.71 |
8-Feb-05/11:59 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Separation by Dovina |
Dovina 12.72.7.83 |
8-Feb-05/11:53 AM |
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From someone with an Arab-sounding name, that means something.
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| Re: a comment on Separation by Dovina |
Dovina 12.72.7.83 |
8-Feb-05/11:50 AM |
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You are fortunate not to be steeped enough in the Christian sects to get this. Funny, there were no Christian sects when Christ was here, no Buddhist sects when Buddha was here.
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| Re: a comment on Separation by Dovina |
Dovina 12.72.7.83 |
8-Feb-05/11:50 AM |
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You know your Bible, as did the girl Iâm writing about. The trouble started when she had only the Bible and the sermons without the caring that the Bible talks about.
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| Re: Ann & Dan & I by Goad |
poodietat 68.51.106.137 |
8-Feb-05/9:37 AM |
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| Re: Ann & Dan & I by Goad |
poodietat 68.51.106.137 |
8-Feb-05/9:20 AM |
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| Re: Ann & Dan & I by Goad |
poodietat 68.51.106.137 |
8-Feb-05/9:20 AM |
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| Re: Nuculer Power by MacFrantic |
poodietat 68.51.106.137 |
8-Feb-05/9:19 AM |
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i like the double-meaning of "rings": "fusion rings" and "rings like".
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| Re: Separation by Dovina |
poodietat 68.51.106.137 |
8-Feb-05/9:14 AM |
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Sorry, I don't get it. Most of the poem seemed as if the character is choosing among competing doctrine, then we find out she already has a fatherless son -- indicating she's already made a choice. Maybe I'm not steeped enough in christian sects to understand this.
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| Re: a comment on Sins of your father by poodietat |
poodietat 68.51.106.137 |
8-Feb-05/9:07 AM |
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Fair comment, good point.
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| Re: Winged Victory by REWellman |
Dovina 12.72.33.127 |
8-Feb-05/7:21 AM |
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From some story about an angel on a rock that I don't know. How we try to keep our stories in stone.
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| Re: Confusion by jroday |
Dovina 12.72.33.127 |
8-Feb-05/7:16 AM |
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Verse 4 is the way a lot of conversations go. Good description. There's no point in even talking when it goes like that.
"Erects a sculpture from the brains of the lazy" is good too,
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| Re: Concerto Chaotic by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
SupremeDreamer 216.99.240.160 |
8-Feb-05/12:31 AM |
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Misspelled thighs.
Bravo motherfucker.
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| Re: a scene in american ghetto by cowmoo |
SupremeDreamer 216.99.240.160 |
8-Feb-05/12:27 AM |
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I'd call this a very rough draft, with a very disappointing ending.
Time to edit boy. Six.
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| Re: The Downfall of a Pagan Man by somemorepoetry |
sliver 64.12.116.135 |
7-Feb-05/10:41 PM |
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I am at a loss for words. I love the way you mixed it all up, And painted such a picture.
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| Re: Back Off by erin35 |
sliver 64.12.116.135 |
7-Feb-05/10:32 PM |
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This one just feels kind of stilted, for lack of a better word. Maybe choppy, no. well, I ramble. Perhaps just a bit smoother? Or... maybe it's just me, what the hell do I know.
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| Re: Provision by erin35 |
sliver 64.12.116.135 |
7-Feb-05/10:29 PM |
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Trapped in the same circle as the rest of us, I see.
Welome to the other side of humanity.
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| Re: Weary by erin35 |
sliver 64.12.116.135 |
7-Feb-05/10:26 PM |
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Yea, I feel it too. What can ya' do?
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| Re: Provision by erin35 |
MacFrantic 205.188.116.67 |
7-Feb-05/7:34 PM |
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