Re: War Story by dougsoderstrom	thepinkbunnyofdoom 216.196.150.43	8-Jan-05/7:05 PM
"Moslem, becoming," just few typos, lots of forest gump rip offs, and a couple of rereads where spacing and metaphors, and spell check come into play
Re: War Story by dougsoderstrom	thepinkbunnyofdoom 216.196.150.43	8-Jan-05/6:55 PM
Have you ever heard of the difference between a letter and a poem?
Re: a comment on Disable by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	thepinkbunnyofdoom 216.196.150.43	8-Jan-05/6:43 PM
yes, I know typos.
Re: Disable by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	thepinkbunnyofdoom 216.196.150.43	8-Jan-05/6:42 PM
Now thats original. No mistaking that for some one else's qoute, what so ever. Seriously nice parity. <3 Jason
Re: The Fear of Being and will not be forever by Prince of Void	cuddlytiger17 209.105.136.92	8-Jan-05/3:11 PM
Some of these lines don't make sense at all...might want to edit some of your grammar and "fury" is with one "r"...
Re: Existential questions by kawakurdi	cuddlytiger17 209.105.136.92	8-Jan-05/3:05 PM
Interesting, but some of your rhymes are really forced.
Re: The Mighty Brahmaputra by Bhaskaryya	horus8 24.130.62.63	8-Jan-05/12:33 PM
An ass-sandwich, holding the pickle.
Re: a comment on The Christ Omelette by horus8	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 82.39.20.249	8-Jan-05/12:19 PM
Yes, the one thing the Romans didn't bargain for was that Jesu would go on an egg-laying rampage after he died. They should have placed out Negroe traps. Not to harm Jesu, just to hold him in place until he could be removed.
Re: a comment on The Christ Omelette by horus8	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	8-Jan-05/11:51 AM
Very few people know that, DA - Kydos to you. And further, since Jesus was a Negro, to this day the eggs are coloured.
Re: a comment on The Christ Omelette by horus8	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.153.196.50	8-Jan-05/11:36 AM
The egg came first. Easter is the celebration of Jesu hatching from an egg.
Re: AL-NAAFIYSH by blacksoul	Crakyamuni 131.252.229.84	8-Jan-05/10:43 AM
Trite.
Re: You have 7 hours to live... now here's the bad news by D. $ Fontera	Crakyamuni 131.252.229.84	8-Jan-05/10:40 AM
I think it's about Texas Hold Em. I love that game.
Re: a comment on The Christ Omelette by horus8	Crakyamuni 131.252.229.84	8-Jan-05/10:37 AM
What came first Jesus or the egg? All unecessary blabbery aside, I think this poem is slap-and-paste poetics. One of your avg. reeds. For sneeking up on the unsuspecting I can only hope. Unfortunately blasphemy is also my arena, and well, I can rock that shit.
Re: a comment on Fanboy by Blindpoetry	Blindpoetry 68.11.192.79	8-Jan-05/10:23 AM
thanks :-D
Re: a comment on War Story by dougsoderstrom	dougsoderstrom 207.80.112.12	8-Jan-05/9:39 AM
Dear Zodiac: I'm not sure where your other response went......... BUT I guess it was a trump..... perhaps. Love, Doug
Re: a comment on War Story by dougsoderstrom	dougsoderstrom 207.80.112.12	8-Jan-05/9:37 AM
Dear Zodiac: You're right..... as I have never as yet participated in a war. I was in the Marine Corps (Platoon Leader Corps) for two weeks back in 1964, but got out due to a physical ailment...... Thank God! But I did my best to pretend what war "might be like." Doug
Re: a comment on War Story by dougsoderstrom	dougsoderstrom 207.80.112.12	8-Jan-05/9:33 AM
Good point, Shuushin. Doug
Re: You have 7 hours to live... now here's the bad news by D. $ Fontera	Dovina 69.175.6.101	8-Jan-05/9:25 AM
If it's about telemarketing, the title should give some hint. It seems like you're talking about several things at once.
Re: a comment on The Mighty Brahmaputra by Bhaskaryya	Bhaskaryya 61.0.144.56	8-Jan-05/9:11 AM
Yes, i indeed have sacrificed.....But it's just a format I wanted to try...I'm still in my experimenting age!!
Re: The Mighty Brahmaputra by Bhaskaryya	Dovina 69.175.6.101	8-Jan-05/9:08 AM
I think you sacrifice too much for the rhymes - grammar, clarity, even interest.