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nentwined on Beyond Love by Dovina 8 Nov 2004, 1:31 PM
This needs more development for me. I want to experience vicariously the depths of ennui.
nentwined replying on The huntsman's shame by Stephen Robins 8 Nov 2004, 1:12 PM
I guess I forget where I was. Next one I read was a zero as well.
nentwined on Daddy's Never There by angelmami17 8 Nov 2004, 1:11 PM
I see.
nentwined on The huntsman's shame by Stephen Robins 8 Nov 2004, 1:10 PM
congratulations. first 0 I've read in some time. :)
nentwined on Bad Year by Miggy 8 Nov 2004, 12:58 PM
I'm afraid I can't tell what you're saying here.
nentwined on Smoke by zodiac 8 Nov 2004, 12:56 PM
Head hurts, yes. Can't quite follow every line. Yet I like it greatly. I think I've got a measure of the whole of it. No suggestions on where I fall. Something to be read and re-read.
Bachus on The huntsman's shame by Stephen Robins 8 Nov 2004, 12:44 PM
Clearly a miracle.
Dovina replying on Beyond Love by Dovina 8 Nov 2004, 11:43 AM
Thank you so much for the help. New last line: “Raise old memories and young hopes, holding a clue to the hidden flaw and nature’s answer in codes like 07, 09, 16, 31, 41 46.”
Dan garcia-Black replying on Beyond Love by Dovina 8 Nov 2004, 10:39 AM
I've traded my thesaurus for fifty pounds of fortune cookies. Today's fortune about your poem says (pardon me as I read with my mouth full), "Always have old memories and young hopes." BTW- your lucky lotto numbers are 07, 09, 16, 31, 41 and 46. Here, I'll open one for myself. It says, "Nature always sides with the hidden flaw." This is better than the magic 8 ball! Doncha think?
Dovina on The huntsman's shame by Stephen Robins 8 Nov 2004, 10:32 AM
And with this statement, England declared war on Los Angeles today, asserting itself as the most lewd.
Dovina on Smoke by zodiac 8 Nov 2004, 10:27 AM
Such a complex way of talking. My head hurts.
Dovina on Caducus (destined to fall) by Caducus 8 Nov 2004, 10:12 AM
The first verse is great, except for heavenly mirth. It's all pretty good.
Dovina replying on Beyond Love by Dovina 8 Nov 2004, 10:04 AM
Perhaps "blip" is too strong. If I had a Thesaurus, I might look for a similar, but less hopeful word. I understand you’ve developed a knack for this and might be able to help.
Dovina replying on Beyond Love by Dovina 8 Nov 2004, 9:53 AM
No, not at the moment, but thank you for asking.
Dovina replying on A Better God by Dovina 8 Nov 2004, 9:51 AM
Aren't we kicking around the same idea?
Dovina replying on Fair Dianne by Dovina 8 Nov 2004, 9:47 AM
It's so nice to be loved for my nature, and it happens so very often here on Poemranker that I tend to become inconsiderate. But please Mr. Z, you're a married man.
Dan garcia-Black on Beyond Love by Dovina 8 Nov 2004, 8:31 AM
Good but could be great if it weren't so hopeful.
Bobjim on One Day I Will be Made of Electric Swords that Will Explode by T. Jonathron Remp 8 Nov 2004, 7:26 AM
Most excellent. Well deserving of a 10.
Stephen Robins on Beyond Love by Dovina 8 Nov 2004, 5:52 AM
Are you getting any at the moment Dovina?
zodiac replying on A Better God by Dovina 8 Nov 2004, 4:06 AM
Maybe. But I can't get past the idea that God would just say to you, "I'm perfect. Surely I know what's the best way to respond to prayers. And anyway, there's tons of prayers I don't answer and tons of great things I do for people who don't pray. It probably seems kind of higgledypiggledy to anyone who isn't perfect." How do you argue with that? Anyone?