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replying on Fair Dianne by Dovina
7 Nov 2004, 12:37 AM
This dog I've seen here likes to run into traffic. It must have been hit about a half-dozen times, is missing a leg, ear, and teeth, etc. I imagine it thinks life is this same steady and unstoppable string of pummellings for everybody. The other dogs, the ones who don't run in traffic, don't say anything - or it doesn't believe them when they do.
I don't know what you mean. I was being serious :-(
You still don't get it. Listen, I'm going to make this really simple:
The grammatical mistakes, logical mistakes, non-tracking metaphors, overabundant cliche, and the frankly kind of boring sensitive self-obsession in your poems makes them - your poems - susceptible to criticism. That's only right, and what we're here for.
Your failure to do anything about them except feel hurt and misunderstood and snippy makes you - the poet, Tara57 - susceptible to criticism. That, too, is justified.
Saying "Your poem is chock-full of grammatickal and other errors" is not an attack on you, Tara57. It's a criticism of your poem, which - well, IS full of them, like "I will drink it down possessed in this game".
Saying, "You've been told dozens of times that you should pay attention to grammar on this site, and you've only gone snippy and bitter about it when anybody with a smidgen of sense would have tried to work on it and maybe improve a little" IS an attack on your person. But IT'S TOTALLY JUSTIFIED by the fact that you responded to the aboveposted criticism of your poem like a total dunce and whiny baby. IT's NOTHING AT ALL LIKE suggesting that my wife is "a sick Islam-baiting skankwhore," or whatever you said.
So just stop, okay? Don't act like we're being unreasonable, like we've got some wack-ass vendetta against you, Tara57, or anything that moves on this site. If you're going to insist on thinking that way, after my patient explanation, I'm afraid I'll have no choice but to believe you're one of the dimmest people I've ever met. Please? Just think about it? I want us to be friends, Tara. Really.
Thanks for your time,
Concerned in Islamica.
No, she's American.
Nice poem! ;)
Is your wife one of those "women"?
Quite planar if I do say so myself.
Adding the same thing to both sides of "tangled"
like this has made me lean out to my shelf
with parallel hands and take my textbook, spangled
with blots and gum, has made me start the fire
in my hearth early this year. You have made
me take the deadened textbook to its pyre
on logs and mourn it with the spark and spade.
Thank God! I cremated my mathbook after
I'd read this poem, though this poem meant
as much as what it made me burn. The scent
of smoke perfumes the rafters. I'm all laughter:
A math-made poem is as out of whack
as fortune-telling by the zodiac.
though the last stanza or so was really really good and so was the beginning. But a lot of it was needlessly complex. Since I'm a dyslexic, (and no, you didn't "offend" me) this poem I guess missed its point. Though I must say that if it's a dyslexic joke, it's quite funny.
Don't say comeback, comeback sounds pugnacious.
I was simply replying to your story with an added tid-bit of my own don't be so irritable my dear.
P.S I still don't care
PPS.I would expect nothing less from you.
"Nothing in the world is more dangerous than sincere ingnorance
and consciencious stupidity"
EXACTLY!!!!
I didn't say he misquoted. I said the source he quoted altered the original version to provisionally accomodate those who would have been put off by "blessed are the poor"
what DOES get one into heaven?
don't be stupid
" Nothing in the world is more dangerous than sincere ingnorance
and consciencious stupidity.going to church, and putting money in the basket does'nt get you in heaven.
dude, i wish these went to 11!
No, jroday quoted it right. Would you like the reference?
why would he have to rape her, when she was presumably throwing herself at him? i think "sodomized" the princess would be better
edpeterson
on One Day I Will be Made of Electric Swords that Will Explode by T. Jonathron Remp
6 Nov 2004, 9:02 AM
good show.
blessed are the poor...period. that is the original ....you have Blessed are the poor in spirit,which is what the church changed it to so as not to put off, or otherwise disturb, the people filling up the collection basket.
Save it for church...
Gobbeldygoop.