edpeterson
on Alone by rrashi
27 Oct 2004, 5:28 AM
and in which orafice were you enjoying this "cone"?
you are so weak.
you are so inadequate.
Prayer is ok but have you tried heroin? Honestly it is the panacea!
By posting this prayer on a public prayer ranking website, you've definitely increased your chances of getting into heaven. Well done!
Astonishing use of "fumes" to rhyme with "perfume".
Yes, I think it would be a good idea for you to replace a grammatically-correct and stupid-sounding line with one that is, at least, correct. The only reasons I can think of that you wouldn't change it is that you think "discover" is an especially exciting and evocative word and you have a poet's somewhat illfounded aversion to the word "thing". As far as discover goes, it's not. You just think so because it's long and you think long words, inappropriately used, are better than short words, appropriately used. If your point is to evoke some feeling for the reader, discover does nothing. Who the fuck has ever discovered anything and then said, oh, what I'm doing now is "discovering"? Hereafter, whenever I hear the word "discover" it will recall for me that dizzying bowel-loosening feeling I have now! No one, that's who.
"Thing" is probably a poor word choice, but not nearly as bad as an ungrammatical, botched-metered line for the sake of using "discover". Why don't you use "everything" in the place of "all the things"? Or figure something out yourself. I'm not going to write your fucking poem for you, JEEZ!!!!
This rings home for me. I've been asked to come cut down some trees from the Hayman burn area on the Eastern slope Of the Colorado Rockies(Just about 50 miles from my home). Turns out I used to picnic where these people are building a house.
So true. the part about the poison.
Hey , do me a favor, read my poem into my world, acrostic. Tell me what you think. It made it to the top ten in less than a week. But personally, I think it's kinda weak.
NOT AS EXCELLENT AS YOUR CATCH PHRASES THAT'S FOR SURE!!!!111
6 words: He's just not that into you.
sorry I was looking for a place to drop that new catch phrase. I think your poetry's excellent.
lol. Never engage a man in his own game. I might learn.
Robed in stench and labour pains
O'er the toilet bowl she strains.
Wretched wails, and glist'ning brow:
OH GOOD LORD PLEASE END IT NOW!
And callously she leaves the boothe
Writhing in a swollen truth.
Left behind to be reviled:
A CATACLYSMIC BROWNIAN CHILD!
Found and left as was
And now I know the cause
No respect for decency laws
‘Twas DA not Santa Clause
I am ashamed. Ashamed of you. You who have left
an unspeakable undrinkable
in the porcelain ranks
of Armitage Shanks.
It's always the one with a mouthful of accusations. flushed out. You should be ashamed.
You're foreign.
A gentleman would have used http://tinyurl.com
yeah well you shouldnt of done you're massive stool there in the first place no wonder the mctoilet went tits-up.