Shade_dreamer
replying on Sleep by Shade_dreamer
16 Aug 2004, 6:36 AM
and before I forget thanks for the appraisal.
help me out. what erors?
"I still think it's one of my bests."
There you go thinking again.
Unbelievably appalling. I shan't comment further on the poetry, but will give you the following important Life Tip: an apostrophe usually indicates a missing letter(or letters). In the case of "wouldn't", the missing letter is the "o" of "not". That's how you know the apostrophe must be between the "n" and the "t". Not between the "d" and the "n". Demonstrate your understanding by correctly placing the apostrophe in the following words: wouldnt, couldnt, thats, theyre (4 marks)
I still think it's one of my bests.
Move on and seek closure
thanks, this much I-------------------------------I
To the one you hung up on,
This is not bad at all. Surprised? Not being noticed by someone who should care is a very sad feeling. Sometimes the only one who takes notice is one who should not rightly care. Therein lies the gold in an otherwise sandy desert that it's best to get used to.
"existed" "No one"
nice...just nice, keep writing
the ending is good - try a little amending though. -8-
I like it, its really nice and I understand it soo much. Great Job!
The last 2 verses could stand better alone. Try leaving out "it is"
Oops. Dilapidated. Anything else? i could find anything, so.
The last 4 lines are especially nice.
Thanks, M.
Is rhyming all? :-(
How sad...well the typos are changed. As far as you passing out, hopefully it was not on the keyboard, that would be slightly uncomfortable!
Ok, zodiac. Fine to join in. But in future I would ask that you share your opinions with the rest of the group before attacking other opinions. Nobody here would claim to know how to solve all the world's problems; it's important that we work together if we're to make any progress. Sometimes other peoples' opinions are bulging and wallyish, but not always. There are times when we can learn a great deal by viewing an issue from a different perspective, wouldn't you agree? Thanks for listening, and I hope to hear from you soon!
Dear cat,
You've been proven wrong and generally marked yourself as a gigantic dim about a dozen times on this page without your knowing it. Your idea of intelligent argument is attacking nearly everything besides your massive generalizations by calling them massive generalizations, and then hoping some frankly nauseating mixture of logicphobia, specious self-deprecation and general cutesiness will get you out of being called a blundering dim to your face. And you've committed the carnal dim of reading "Could you explain what you mean by X" as "I have no idea what X means in reality". Dim, dim, dim.
PS-You're not PC, since you're patently an anti-PCist, a Britishist, and an internet-userist. You've just been taught that a bunch of things are bad to say about certain downtrodden ethnics and are afraid to think anything else. -0-
PPS-You're totally wrong; richa pretty much hates -=Dark_Angel=-. -0-
PPPS-"Most" isn't a save, it's a qualifier. Only an purebred dim would think it's anything else, but that's because only dims (including most Americans) think mainly in clodheaded generalizations themselves. -0-