Rhymes are off, iambic pentameter is not there, and the sire.fire rhyme is forced, as are they all. This is actually a pretty good specimen of the crap that happens when young'uns like you think they can be profound. -blessed with a 2- Really, I'm being hard on you because I am expressing an honest opinion, not because I'm retaliating.

Technically terapin burgers. Funny.

Wow, a built in brush-off excuse: "Don't tell me you dislike what you read It simply means that you do not understand The beauty of this free verse Is hidden between the words" A new poemranker low!!!

Brill!

Still, spot on.

I have to give you a compliment. Consistency.

They did "it"? I think I get this but, I think it can be done better. Lines one and two are kind of telling, and for my own edification, why grandmums?

I there are also other explanations, but I'll accept yours.

The thong part did it for me, i dont like it.

wow. it was a lot more entertaining than i could have expected, and though i've got a foot phobia, i enjoyed it. as a poem it's well rounded, though the fetish frightens me personally.

abrupt ending, but point made.

short and to the point. it perfectly describes the general mood of the event, though still vague in a "you'd have to know to know" kind of way.

it made me stop and say "hmm..." the rhyming was done quite nicely as well, and didn't detract from the poem itself.

I like as well

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