Prince of Void
on The Dream by x0lovelylarnx0
21 Jul 2004, 3:53 AM
That was good
I think the poem was nicely writen!
Might want to scratch "Feeling Like" from the title.
"Iâm masquerading as someone who loves you." "Not technically lies." Good lines.
How ironic.
Silly rabbit.
I hope that you like this poem!
?-Dave_Mysterious-?
replying on Four and a half paragraphs of silence by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
20 Jul 2004, 11:30 AM
I forgot to add: you would have to be in a sound proof boothe inside the helicopter.
?-Dave_Mysterious-?
replying on Four and a half paragraphs of silence by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
20 Jul 2004, 11:30 AM
Yes. I was just pushing the genre to new bounds. Ideally, this poem should be read from a helicopter and radioed to the audience back on the ground.
Illumine sounded sweeter. I think they mean the same.
why illumine and not illuminate?
unspeakable
where da white womens be at???
excellent cockrings and machineguns...staccato whispers.
Funny! Women rule.
BTW Thank you
Sometimes naievete in rabbits is hard to distinguish from a keen sense for sizing up their predicament.
BTW, I think that the lack of connective tissue between phrases, sentences and images makes for a slower read. It gives the poem time to form in my thoughts and the end is stronger for your style.
I never see rabbits when I'm driving at night unless they are wearing red, reflective tape. You have a good eye.
Well! Obviously you no longer need my help. Fine work.
don't like cave-ins. Still, enjoyable.
mmm-hmmm.