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donmiguel1960 on Ago by Enkidu 16 Jul 2004, 8:57 AM

its a good start

donmiguel1960 replying on You are my very Heart by donmiguel1960 16 Jul 2004, 8:54 AM

Thanks for your coment. You seem to really understand the art. is this your major?

fevriere on The Beautiful Chase by smlink84 16 Jul 2004, 1:27 AM

No love for this verse.

fevriere on The Nude by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 16 Jul 2004, 1:26 AM

I dunno, it was a bit stupid but could be brilliant if you altered the last stanza. I spose.

jdc on Ode to the bun (Day 11) by jdc 15 Jul 2004, 11:16 PM

Thanks for the heartfelt sentiment, touching really,sniff * and all for Poetry day today in little ol NZ

edwardo on Ode to the bun (Day 11) by jdc 15 Jul 2004, 10:22 PM

*sob* beautiful *sniff* just beautiful.

edwardo on You are my very Heart by donmiguel1960 15 Jul 2004, 10:20 PM

i like that the last line is out of meter and out of rhyme, however the ametered fourth line feels somewhat awkward; thematically, no comment, a classic ode

Dovina replying on Sacrament by Dovina 15 Jul 2004, 7:39 PM

When coupled with your 10-vote, this comment is very funny and compassionate, perhaps made by one who might be taking a little bread and wine as we speak.

Dovina replying on Sacrament by Dovina 15 Jul 2004, 7:34 PM

Thanks, and that would shorten it and make it more readable. I was holding to the tenor of the Bible text in order to show a relationship of pain and the way she symbolized hers with respect for His.

Dovina replying on Sacrament by Dovina 15 Jul 2004, 7:32 PM

I presume you call it sick because it is based on the Scripture of the Last Supper as recorded in the four Gospels. Frankly, I worried that some people would see it as belittling those accounts. I hoped to show the womanâs personal understanding and connection with that event, and through her own suffering, how she came to understand the way He symbolized his to his friends. I was intentionally ambiguous, leaving room for several interpretations. You have seen and reacted to one of them. I hope it will not be the only one as you reread it and try to understand my position.

Dan garcia-Black on Sacrament by Dovina 15 Jul 2004, 7:26 PM

Seems like you sucked one poet into taking the position you sought-- Open fly hook with a plastic jesus hanging from a fishing line of gold nylon. Reel 'im in, Dovina. Flop him onto the deck and hit him on the head with a bowling pin. Then multiply him with your loaves. Ah men!

Shuushin on Sacrament by Dovina 15 Jul 2004, 5:55 PM

Nice. not sure you need the first line of the last stanza. maybe add " always" after "She does it"

electroman1979 on Sacrament by Dovina 15 Jul 2004, 5:40 PM

what kind of sick poetry is this?

Dan garcia-Black on A Perverted Poet's Confession. by SupremeDreamer 15 Jul 2004, 10:04 AM

I was going to give it a -10-. But after I noticed EP gave it a nine, I decided that he might have more enzyte, I mean, insight.-9-

jauser on One Nation Under God by GAC 15 Jul 2004, 9:25 AM

I don't know I think it's good but then the God part kills it.

Stephen Robins on Lincolnshire by longships 15 Jul 2004, 7:25 AM

Lincolnshire looks like a poo splattered tramp after a night on the gas which has been ironed as flat as crystal's chest.

Stephen Robins on Dawn Jig by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? 15 Jul 2004, 6:18 AM

This is haunting enough to send a shiver down Christopher Reeves spine. 1--1

patty t on swallow it by anonandonandon 14 Jul 2004, 9:45 PM

a darn sight better than voicing her swallows

?-Dave_Mysterious-? on swallow it by anonandonandon 14 Jul 2004, 4:26 PM

I find this crude and offensive.

?-Dave_Mysterious-? replying on The Heaven lies by Prince of Void 14 Jul 2004, 4:06 PM

That doesn't even mean anything.