Quarton
on transmutation by William Delacroix
5 Jul 2004, 3:06 PM
I am speechless. So much written to say so little.
You need to say more using an economy of words.
Kites washing away sorrow.
dimming in to the darkness
What does "inaccurate of language" mean?
Kind of like a bad soap opera. Sorry.
You've got to be kidding! I'll give you a three just
for having the guts to post it.
Short and sweet. Nice imagery.
Rainbows don't flicker. Other images are inaccurate of language. It's a common theme and hard to do well.
Oops, I forgot to congratulate you on having, not one, but
two of your poems on the list of the 20 worst. Nice job,
you turkey.
This is good. Good title.
Try removing "confined to" from "an air of vanity, thus giving her some choice.
"faltered ego" seems imprecise, maybe faulted.
Ps. I dont mean i have a little dick
Very cute, but you're not following the paradelle form.
I've read your comments before and they really don't bother
me as long as I consider the source. You are pathetic.
I love this poem its just like the stuff that happen to me. its just so funny.
10/10
very good like it
It stinks
it stinks
stink it
stink it
it does??
it does stink
It may not be worth the trouble.
Thanks and welcome back. How was the beach?
it is the tale of a mermaid who once her path was chosen she would never be able to return to her life as a mermaid, so yes, it was impassable