god'swife
on A Strenuous Recollection by Doug
11 Jun 2004, 7:50 PM
What can I say you're like so totally awesome. i f I lived next door to you I'd spend the whole day pining at the kitchen window, waiting for you to walk out the front door, then I'd 'conveniently(teehee) step outside just hoping maybe you'd notice the new hip-huggers I bought at Nordstroms with the 80 bucks I save up from my allowance the birthday money!
It must be great to be you.
Nice use of torper, and lassitude.
Your so clever"god'swife" I wish you lived next door!
wow, this is amazing!!!
'Struggling...strangled by hands of chance(and clocks)'
You're so insightful, you know, you really have your thumb on the pulse of life.
I especially like the way you capitalized Fate and Time, really drives the message home.
Welcome to poemranker! :)
horus8 and sharpdick are engadged in a 69er as we speak.
Your both or I mean you are a great critic or words,save your own!
A Parson's Nose By Sir Nudely Of Niggerly
Past your nose you will spot,
a parson that is for you to cot...
and felch for the viewing of the Abbot.
A parson who's always there, never busy,with a pear.
"who will put you on a pedestal;"
The right place for you to be lubed
and twhen tyou're twogwether,
the tworld twould twop,
Uranus shall pull;
and retrograde
and the parson would then palm-aid
both of your nose.
though far apart thy cheeks
Norwegian wood, should arise...
that parson would keep you in their heart,
with his nose betwixt your thighs
querries would be answered,
stains queerly erased.
and from the parson's love stuff floweth,
like mountain fresh springs, and HOT GAY SEX.
Change "hope" to Pope, and then I believe you'll still have fleck, but it will be HOLY fleck.
The comments which god'swife left were referring to an earlier draft of this.
The real question here is: If Poemranker is so lame, why are you here? Don't be bitter becuase she didn't like your poem(s). And, I'm assuming that is the reason for your hostility. People calls 'em like they sees 'em and if you can't handle the criticism, you shouldn't post.
Thanks for the 10, by the way.
You know a fleck?
Like flea doo.
Godswife why are you so bitter? you really need to get a life outside of lame internet sites...really!
Sharpdick you are a sad little man.Try a new hobby.
Rarely does. This current cut though, BOUNDS ahead of the first one. I like it much better.