Shuushin
on The daisy-chain girl by richa
10 Jun 2004, 6:00 PM
"do like [we do]"
the verb "to be" is a bit overdone here, R.
I originally wrote this as a joke and admit it
probably should have been left unposted. I'll do
better next time(:
You know, and this is just me...but I think if you're going to give somebody a 0, the least you can do is leave a comment giving a reason.
and you'll always will be
Thats the most beautiful part about it. childish and ineffective, thats the best description of my writing style to date.
Thanks :)
<3 Jason
Poetically, small improvements. Financially...(puts hands in pockets, looks at ground, kicks rocks) And I'm worried about our other Grande Dame. But, little I can do but pray. Glad to hear you're doing well!! Are you staying? Or is this a temporary visit?
Nice poem. You don't need to ask that rhetorical question, it's childish and ineffective.
It truly is a masterpiece
Of criticism.
Your painting?
Your painting looks like shit...
eewww.
I'm comfuzzled. The 'us' isn't clear, who are 'us'? You're structure is only the best. If I take each line individually they're lovely but what does it all mean?
It's easy. Just click on 0, then click on submit, and voila!
Sounds like you're really making strides. Little by little is how all the best have described it.
I've never been happier. My husband indulges my every whim, my son is growing bigger and more beautiful each day. I have absolutely nothing to complain about. How's things with you?
ah horus...displaying signs of the kentucky fried state of mind
a misanthrope or merely missed the boat?
yeh your mate freddy niche didn't have much time for humble folks either, too long gazing into the abyss or too much scratching that syphilis? who cares anyway
i've always been a leg man myself....but then I never got to carry the red basket...still...
parallels!!!!!
I love it, i really do
god'swife-How can you give me a zero and not leave a comment?
Wow, vague with a great sense of inner wisdom being displayed, but I still feel as though I missed it. I love the slothful line 'shake the low branches
Yes, humans are rather limited in the beauty of death. -10-
I love the monochromatic image. Of course, people who die by mortar shell explosions, traffic accidents and serial killers with knives die more colorfully. But the aged do tend to wilt in the way you describe.
hauntingly resonates with my hang-over this morning.