wilco
on 'Till Then by sliver
17 May 2004, 1:32 PM
That's quite a sad little song...played mostly in minor chords I'd bet..
you do know you can never go back??
I'd give the poem an 8, but since I just read that you're a social worker I'm going to give you a 10. This is because, as a social worker, I know how bad it is.
A 10 simply for the title (and the poem's not bad either. Slayer does suck.
titan69
on On the Discovery of the Hated Tree and Another T.V. Dinner by MacFrantic
17 May 2004, 1:18 PM
this poem started of great. then i didnt understand
a word of it?
you have a great way with words!
I think this is how a haiku should be written. The first image and then a different image (the blackbirds) linked to the first.
Would leave out jealous though. Haikus are about imagery more than most other forms. Image without need for explanation.
Not so much to grab onto, a lot of abstracts. Like how it begins.
a welcome epilogue of mr intransit, cool - likey !
not homosexual, why do you ask?
maybe i'm more bloody than poemranker.
bloodier?
create your own commas - not my style.
Ani D.- "We'll see what you are made of by what you make of me."
edpeterson
on On the Discovery of the Hated Tree and Another T.V. Dinner by MacFrantic
17 May 2004, 9:25 AM
I think we treeists...fucking hilarious -0-
Shuushin
on On the Discovery of the Hated Tree and Another T.V. Dinner by MacFrantic
17 May 2004, 9:10 AM
Arborists, I think. And "we [treepeople]"
Good rhyme with contraire. Nice title.
Ever read "poison tree"?
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hatedestruction
on Barometric pressure & true love (The prince of storms) by Jeremi B. Handrinos
17 May 2004, 7:36 AM
been there before