edpeterson
on Highschool in My Head by MacFrantic
12 May 2004, 7:07 AM
haiku?
You have absolutely no idea what you're talking about, do you?
The best part is the spiders that cover you like insects.
I've always assumed that, in the original, the half rhyme was meant to imply that really Dr. Foster had stepped in a piddle right up to his middle, and it was in fact a sewage related incident.
This good, I like the attempt to bring in the sounds of the situation. And it makes me think of 'Lady Godiva's Operation' by the Velvet Underground, which is a great song.
Here comes the moment of great decision
As the doctor is making his first incision.
-no vote-
Diolch yn fawr.
Great use of 'cried' to rhyme with 'side', but was her head really hung in defeat? I doubt it. You just needed her head to be hung in something that rhymed with 'feet'.
Ysgrifennais i yn yr iaith achos dw i'n dysgu Cymraeg. Dw i'n dysgu nawr ers tua dwy flynedd. Dw i'n eisiau gweld os dw i'n gallu ysgrifennu yn ail iaith.....probably this is riddled with grammatical mistakes - mae'n flin 'da fi. Feel free to correct the poem if it doesn't make sense.
Dw i'n gwneud PhD yn llenyddiaeth o Gymru yn Saesneg. Ac mae diddordeb mawr gyda fi yn llenythiaeth Gymraeg. Dw i'n lico Gwenallt a Waldo Williams.
You are a snot gobbler.
In no way does this endless mass of cuntbutter deserve anything above an 8. This poem is a narcissistic mess and the imagery is some of the weakest I have ever read.
A festering phlegm-wod.
Can you spot the difference between a poeme that "contains emotions" and a 'poeme' that "occured during an emotional moment"? And what's this obsession with saying "bow'ls"? That is so immature, I swear. Your just angry that cuddlytiger didn't finish reading one of your poemes, and now your taking it out on one of hers, even though its a quite good poeme.
What website? and way the by, How old are you? Your interpretations are well thaught out and strike a chord, good job.
If you want to know how much I appreciate it, read my poem "To My Love", It's about to the bottom of my list. I wrote it about ten years ago, Still haven't found it!, Maybe someday...
Et aussi, si j'ose en ajouter, 'lui permit', ou bien 'lui permettait', mais non pas 'le', puisque Beckett est un nom propre et non un nom commun.
S'il vous plaît... 'Il n'y a guère DE style là :', ce me semble. Et je crois que l'on devrait ne point traduire le titre de la pièce, et donc que le dernier vers se traduise 'Moins qu'en "En attendant Godot" ', étant donné que la pièce de Beckett fut d'abord écrite en français (tout comme le Salomé de Wilde, en fait), et que ce poème fait bien moins de sens si le titre est donné en anglais, puisque l'idée est qu'il n'y a guère de style en français, et que l'on pourrait donc en attendre un peu dans sa traduction anglaise.
Try Trowsus yn Gymraeg
Try Trowsus yn Gymraeg
*waves hand*
Mae dy haiku yn dda