wilco
replying on American Idle by wilco
5 May 2004, 2:03 PM
I know what you're saying but please see the above (and ongoing) exchange between Shuushin and myself.
Depends on waht you expect to accomplish with your writing. If you don't care if anyone enjoys it and simply want to create art, then I think it's ok. But then you go back to the aforementioned question of "why do it at all if no one wants to read it". In other words, I don't know. I just write 'em and hope that SOMEBODY likes 'em while still letting me say what I want to say.
heheh - my Caesar complex kicking in again.
needs a bit of a hint as to what woman we are dealing with here. mom? sis? girlfriend? other? It is worthy of the effort.
eeaaasy killer.
It will recieve a much better title. When I find one.
(Rummaging through fat backs' bin) Nope. not here.
Funny. hate is like cold - ok, maybe more like cold than its usual hot descriptor.
Again, I'm sorry, but the title seems unjust to your story. And why not include egret/regret somehow? - I liked that. It's a good, sad story everyone can understand, so why not a dignified title?
You know thats an Eagles song (too?), right?
I love that song. It's my Tom Waits favorite. Happy to see sombody on the far-away East Coast likeing my underdog. Sure would like to see him in concert and sober, or nearly so.
This poem expresses your feeling. As the arguement goes between this and presenting an enjoyable poem, I tend toward correctness and understandability, but I think this needs a lettle help in the prose dept. Good feelings like these are worthy of a little more care on the presentation. For what it's worth.
Then you are a fool, and your opinions on the matter are discarded.
I grow bored with you - you may let yourself out.
Yes, was thinking that. Its a bit of a quandry though: do you make the poem express the emotion at the expense of making it unenjoyable - I mean this in a global sense, btw; not that yours was necessarily unenjoyable (had some very good parts).
tired. But that's the idea.
Was there bad language in this one?
Undertow and Opiate are Excellent, Aenima? was ok and I never did buy Lateralus. The Eagles were good in their day but should have shot themselves before "Hell Freezes Over" and Bjork.....no.
wFraser Allonby Q.C.w
replying on Beard my Homemade Negro Jesus (Improved! With AIDS!) by Everyone
5 May 2004, 12:04 PM
P.S. I will be contacting the F.B.I. in due course.
wFraser Allonby Q.C.w
on Beard my Homemade Negro Jesus (Improved! With AIDS!) by Everyone
5 May 2004, 12:02 PM
... FIRST WE WITNESSED THE BIRTH OF AN IDEA ...
29-Mar-04/7:57 AM: "I don't mean poets shouldn't try to write about those things, but they would have to be more careful doing it than, say, writing about ducks with AIDS or appropriate beard materials for homemade Negro Jesuses, since so many people have written about Love and so on before and hardly anyone has written about ducks and Jesuses - sadly."
... THEN WE WERE GIVEN TEASINGLY CRYPTIC PROMISES ...
21-Apr-04/7:47 PM: "The best title in ages is "Beard My Homemade Negro Jesus", coming soon to poemranker!"
... AGAIN WE HEARD RUMOURS OF THE IMPENDING MASTERWORK ...
22-Apr-04/5:02 PM: "I think Justin would be more impressed if you wrote poems about non-Justin things for a change, like Beard Materials for Homemade Negro Jesuses. No offense, just my opinion, etc etc etc etc etc."
... AND NOW, AFTER MANY SLEEPLESS NIGHTS WRESTLING TO BREAK FREE FROM THE GILDED HARNESSE OF COMMON DECENCY, THE POEME OF THE YEAR HAS BEEN UNLEASHED ...
MacFrantic
replying on On the Discovery of High Noon and The Devil in a Glass Jar. by MacFrantic
5 May 2004, 11:46 AM
*jarred* means -put in a jar- I was simply going for the image of the devil demanding my soul from within a jar. Which reminds me.
"In England Smoky the Bear is not the forest fire prevention representative. They have Smacky the Frog.
It's just like a bear, but it's a frog. I think it's a better system, I think we should adopt it. Because bears
can be mean, but frogs are always cool. Never has there been a frog hopping toward me, and I thought
' man, I'd better play dead. Here comes that frog...' You never say here comes that frog in a nervous
manner. It's always optimistic. Hey here comes that frog, al-right. Maybe he'll come near me so I can
pet him, and stick him in a mayonnaise jar, with a stick and a leaf, to recreate what he's used to."
- Mitch Hedburg (Hilarious
Shuushin
on On the Discovery of High Noon and The Devil in a Glass Jar. by MacFrantic
5 May 2004, 11:37 AM
Help me with "tightly jarred"
Good ones, even with my confusion.