Last line of first verse needs a ". This flows very nicely right up to the end. The only problem is that I don't see what happened. He made it through the storm, then in the clear day we find his ship capsized and him sinking to hell.

nice, but where are the six other sins?

The ending! That's the good part. If only the poem worked rhythmicly toward it.

Good idea, but too wordy. Poetry should provoke thought, not tell everything, and definitely not repeat anything.

I've read some of Poe, not all. Wish I knew what you are referring to.

For Glory and esprit de corps! The lone comma seems crying for help from buddies. I think they would ease the flow. I am hoping you will take the time to answer my comment in response to your comment on "Didactic Phoneticals."

interesting.

I don't get it. Besides that, "aloud -> allowed".

"providing a joyous occasion the memory of all." Somehting grammetically displeasing about this line.

To create a machine or enslave a human that thinks like a slave and works like a slave has been the goal for a long time. Good summary.

"I'd hate to believe I was caught in a feeling" Of course you were caught in a feeling. You don't show me why this has to be over.

This may be the first time I think I understand a poem of yours. The lesson of the tutor is repugnant green. The student wants cushy blue. But the icky green is just a reflection from the sycamore. But what are the fishes - reflections of sycamore leaves, maybe. All sorts of nice implications here. Love it.

cute.

"The question 'Can machines think?' is as ill-posed and uninteresting as the question 'Can submarines swim?'" - Edsger Dijkstra