Still, it's nice. A humble poet is not to be taken lightly :)

Hey, thanks for helping me out with the comments today. This isn't bad btw - needs a little more I think though; its just the start of a character. Make [you] do something.

I like it because I feel dead and jealous. "streets that I've known"

Last stanza is fairly good - did you start with that one at first? Prolly sould be cut down by a third overall.

"giuse" ui "You need it, you look " - "you'll look"? "Fr" "For" beyond that - quite good. The simple and repetitive words like "like" is deceiving - works well. A fairly strong effort on a topic that could easily be (and often is) badly done.

Because of the frost-like opener expectations get ratcheted up, I think. But the language falls short - a reasonably good concept but it doesn't flow. Doesn't endear. How to fix? Sorry I can't help with any specific nips or tucks; read more Frost, I guess.

With thousands words the moon reflects the sea (?) Would it calm down or would just explode that stuff is, ah - ungood.

predictable yes, but the ending was worded more beautifully than past arrangements. well done.

Hello Mr. Bike. I like the word usage (zodiac is on crack) - this has a mature feel to it. I think a typo in "velevt" though - and prolly "coming off" could be made more, especially considering the language around it. Maybe that would be too much? Dunno - consider it, see what u come up with.

LoL - the rhyme feels self-effacing, and that's cool. I like this one!

this switching from iambic to trochaic in this context kinda makes my brain hurt. Know what I mean? It has such a classic feel that I've been trained to think it will be iambic all the way through. So many rose poems in the world, were it not for the very last sentiment I'd completely forget it after the read.

This is concrete poetry.

Gadzooks!

Gosh!

Zounds!

Egad!

Golly!

Darn!