daveslady
on Yellow! by AuntyM
5 Mar 2004, 2:46 PM
very true! made me laugh
I'm not trying to stop them. But I just realized this is the 295th of this exact poem I've read in the last 2 months, which has made me momentarily bitter beyond even the trasitory healing powers of gasoline-huffing and rough masturbation. How does one keep from becoming a shriveled husk of a person here?
If any of you at all seemed even halfway open to real critical comments, this site probably wouldn't be such a pants-wetting nightmare from which there is no waking. Don't you think?
What are you talking about? Half the point in poemeranker is that everbody throws tantrums when their BS poetry gets slagged off.
If any of you at all seemed even halfway open to real critical comments, this site probably wouldn't be such a boring, soul-blackening mindfuck. Don't you think?
Often at night I wake up to sound of my own screams, and then I realise that I have just based my entire personality on my love for a hot beverage.
No. By the way, I read 'o.O' as your two differently-sized testes with a bit of vas deferens cross-section. Am I wrong?
With this piece, you have balmilised a dumpling that is Beyond Thunderdome. It fails so utterly, that no amount constructive criticism could hoist it from the plunging U-bend to the giddy heights of a lingering death on the toilet bowl, smeared against the porcelain slopes like a squashed urchin. No my friend, this dropping is destined to remain below the waterline, where it shall wallow and sob in a state of appalling agony until the last days of its miserably short life are utterly spent. It's time to pull the chain and move on, lest the contemplation of one stool should hamper the coiling of t'other. Good try though! -10-
bow'ls
terrible is the under-statement of the centry and you have the nerve, oh well i thought this site was about poetry, but seems as though it is just another bulletin board for people to pick on one another with no real thought of what is accually going on, so for this i say adu, and will now leave this dreadful site for i can go anywhere on the net and find this crap
What is a write? Is it like an invite to a swim meet?
wonderful write
very descriptive write.
Very passionate write. I really enjoyed it.
**w'ls ..... How'ls ??? hahhaa okay uhmmm o.O you confuze me man..
HAH..no..That end part would be a ghood Rap like song but not a sucky poem thing...lol yeah ok BLAH BLAH o.O
Wooo im in a singing mood hahaha!!! yeah its a slow song so when i go YOU it doesnt mean im yelling i was just making clear to yawl that HE was the one who started the foray not me :) kk !
The repeated as-s were deliberate, but maybe they don't work. I dont think on the past tense it would have quite the same effect. The phrase about the news is fairly odd, but again that's deliberate, trying to find slightly off kilter ways of saying things. But I'm glad you liked it, and thank you for your constructive commetns.
If any of you at all seemed even halfway open to real critical comments, this site probably wouldn't be such a depressing, soul-blackening mindfuck. Don't you think?