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on We visited the gay men on the veranda by Frass
3 Mar 2004, 7:22 PM
I enjoyed the illustration
don't mean to come off as very critical but do you know what an apostrophe is? youre, ill, etc...they all have apostrophes. also, "alwayz" is spelt with an 's' somewhere in there.
"when i need 2 be alone" to
the content is there, but maybe try and fix some grammatical errors, because this is just like reading an AIM conversation, without the reader's response.
-8- because the poem, though unoriginal (horus8 will tell you that i have no right to say that), is still well put together and communicated
nice poem, keep writing cause this is great
re "beatutiful cemetary" - if this were intentional, it would be beyond genius.
That may be so, my friend, but I can assure you that I would not read a poem called "Child of My Buttocks"
I'm afraid the idea of needing no Sunday clothes is plagiarised from my poeme 'Child of my Buttocks' (http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.
Almost made me cry
Very emotional....and for that....a 10
well.. thanks! there is meaning in my title... I didn't try to make it that creative.. thats just what its about... basically Their Little Girl.. explains the poem.. 2 is because i found a poem my mom wrote.. i re wrote it and changed it but with the same meaning .. and called it 2 for it as being the next generation.. *me being her child*
thanks !
-Angie
**w'ls
You are Jeremi, right? I get confused by the whole horus8 tangle.
Based on solely my own (and pretty subjective) experience, I'd say amateur web-posted poetry is currently unpunctuated more often than it is correctly punctuated, and that published poetry is more often punctuated correctly etc etc etc. So it depends on what you're conforming to.
[slaps forehead] oh yeah.
By write it for myself i mean to get it out of my system not to keep it locker away although that's what i did with most of it until a few years ago. oh well...thanks for the compliment hidden in there though... i'll try not to bludgeon you too much more.
thank you... you get it.
And that excuses a stream of rant? Shut me up with a vote. Great plan.
EE Cummings, for one.
Don't get tetchy about this.
Poemranker has shit poems and great poems, and this is the shitly expressed great poem of an amateur. An amateur! That's what I am. So, I appreciate your criticism and you must expect a small amount of covering-own-arse-style bullshitting. Next time, I will just submit meekly to your abusive eye.
Well, your point is very fair, and probably true. Do you think misuse of punctuation gets a poet rejected? I appreciate how it might look to the critical eye.. Amateurish, messy, hard to follow. If I sorted the punctuation, I don't suppose it will hurt the poem. My teacher suggested getting rid of all punctuation, which I would find preferable to making it very.. *tries not to say conformist*.. Correct. Readable.
And you're wrong, I'm not an attacker. I'm just a debater.