horus8
replying on Quest! by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
22 Feb 2004, 5:24 PM
Yes, the cat's out of the bag... "bow'ls".
Feeling frisky are we? In my opinion, I aqgree with you however, I think unless you're a pro at doing what a million authors before you have done better, don't.
Flux capacitors can only be devised whilst on the toilet.
Indeed, yes, just yesterday at 87 mph as my yugo was literally rattling itself appart and catching air (like the Columbia's rentry), I found myselfing wishing I had worn mine, before I was spared teleportation, due to my sheer genius of taking the time to create my own flux capasitor out of a bra, an old atari, a best of oingo boingo cd, and some spare Plutonium I happened to be saving in a clothing trunk in the attic.
Now you are just being silly. Besides, Michael J Fox's life jacket was clearly to protect him from the effects of travelling at ungodly speeds in excess of eighty-eight miles per hour.
You spelled 'Cream' "Dream" for one.
And 'Monkey Fluff', "foilage", but I thought that was brilliant.
Indeed, remember when the kept asking Michael J. Fox what was with the life jacket in back to the future, and when the Navy would be setting sail! Yay. But one must ask if a chicken breast was wearing a vest would that said breast be a lesbian turkey tit imposter?
Dull
My bicylce exploded many eons ago. It seems it was unworthy of my excellent buttocks.
The comment was in response to a mispelled comment by devina. I can't see any obvious mispelling in your piece.
Gone -- why is it capitalised.
If you could point out spelilng errors that would help. Thanks.
A. Nomaly
replying on The Motherfuckers and The Mystery of Life by Jeremi B. Handrinos
22 Feb 2004, 8:31 AM
Both, but it sounds like we should just assume new identities, why live in the past (drugs are wonderful for memory erasing- I dont do any so I remember everything. Anyway, my name is Kristin, I am a painter.
I thought this was going to be a celebration of the 80s metal band 'Grave Digger'. Fuck you.
Well, I wouldn't go as far to say it is CLSish for two reasons, one - you actually say something here that is between the lines, two - I've read some of your other stuff and I know you are not of her ilk (but I can see how richa think so). Yours is more of a soldiers perspective, where her's is more of a - child.
So, this one: a few line breaks and line spacings would help quite a bit, imho. I suppose you stuck the lone period in there and ommitted any other punctuation for a reason - not feeling it. The string of capitals feels anagramatic... which would be interesting.
I like "They did not invite me", btw.
LoL - I saw the title and a first thought it said
"Peeing Sun", then had a little adolescent laugh, opened the poem - and saw "snow".
Yeah, I need to grow up.
Ahem, okay. I like the peeping tom angle.
I will write you an... hmmm... theres the top circle... now,
left side... around the top: the bottom circle -
a bright vitamin enhanced "8".
I see richa has added a haiku too - I will add to yours then in the renga tradition:
Blanket of the snow,
covers earths naked beauty
from the peeping sun.
white satin coolness adorns,
hillsides of crocus asleep.
Sunshine's fingertips
reach from afar but dare not -
hides behind mountains.
So many articles and pronouns, so little space ...
This thing almost takes off, but then it's gets hobbled by so many "the"s and "our"s and "we"s -- let it go free my blue-eyed tattooed lass -
Pour acid apon it and see the weak words run away; the stong will survive.
let
it
free.
This is perfectly alright.
instrument of sin? coyly CLS
What do the dreadful curtains symbolise, and are they dreadful because the match the sofa?
silk purse corset
hints of my covered self's
inner nudity