zodiac
replying on Sci-fi ode to poemranker nicknames by zodiac
2 Feb 2004, 12:16 PM
In English lit, oddly enough.
You are so fucking brilliant
'...Laquered land...'
'...Lowly throne...'
'...Entwined in shame...'
I wish I had your talent for words. Who the hell are you? it's been a pleasure, sincerely, your the tops.
Fantastic potential. How many times have you re-written this? It deserves some strong attention. Your beginning really needs to be done over. Sometimes you can get to the point more precisely if you try for less words to make the point. Of course that's my ultimate arguement, I'm all for concise language. For example
"When you re-crafted me for the third time"
"Re-crafting me for the third time".
It's the tininest difference but you go through this poem and tighten it up I think you'll be pleased. I like your poem, and your use of like words to accent the huge differences between you. Keep practicing.
Cool, especially the ending.
'I can´t explain all of this' no but you could at least try to!
I take it you did not like my picture of a floating poo then?
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
replying on Tales From The Outhouse by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
2 Feb 2004, 10:15 AM
One day, perhaps not today, perhaps not e'en tomorrow, but one day, one lonely day, when the precious oils of youth have sadly slicked themselves from your once glistening hide, on that absurdly dry day, that day of humiliating de-balmilisation, you'll come to regret that remark, richa. By God Sir there'll be hell to pay if you don't!!!!11
Crap -0-
Fascinating. I like that. I never had a destiny before. This one I get in triplicate. I feel special.
I read everything -=Dark_Angel=- writes on this site as a tribute to you, rockmage; just as everything you post is a tribute to him. You are yen and yang, linked by more than just the length of your beards. I prophecy that each of you will fulfill the other's destiny in some startling and grotesque fashion.
I did not see your tribute to me. I feel left out in the cold. I shiver. I moan. I saw one many moons ago by tomcheese and there is one each by baba yaga and stephen robins.
And I was afraid you wouldn't understand. Silly Me!
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
replying on Tales From The Outhouse by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
2 Feb 2004, 8:20 AM
spoken like a true sufferer of Inadequate Beard Syndrome
Whitey's ain't shit. Lefty's is where it's at. Password: KEN SENT ME.
Wasn't it long enough?
I deleted all your votes. Sorry.
Ungh...
I guess they're your stereotypes too. You didn't do anything to make them more. By which I mean, it's good writing, and great images, but ultimately nothing.
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