horus8
on American Eden v.2 [revised] by SupremeDreamer
12 Jan 2004, 12:30 PM
Canonic... sweit.
Finally got around to giving this ole piece the face lift it desperately needed.
You could of just said "Marilyn Manson is just another 'freak' with pale makeup that plays industrial metal intended to fuel teenage angst 'n frustration."
And a confused pop star that can sell his odd 'n eccentric "paintings" to many "misguided" fans...
"just cuz he made them without numbers" (despite
being advised to use them by his agent & Trent Reznor)
Nice hunting traps. 8.
Is that your way of saying "I can't understand what you write so instead of admitting to ignorance, I'll declare your work poorly written & unintelligible."?
I think so.
(comment directed at little_big_nose)
to Jesus: Have you seen my goat? he answers to the name of Cashoe?
Amen.
That was a mouthful of warm ice-cream.
LMAO.
Indeed. Blessed with ten.
You should trip the black ones?
'Hang like blues' doesn't make any sense.
And I know there are those that have to cause fear, that would have us believe there were criminals on every corner. Nevertheless how did these criminals manage to sneek into your poem.
His hands kissed you? must be to do with strumming but..
Yeah, I'm Audrey's very besttest friend,Kristy, might I say, one of your best,Anthony!
forest's wet or forest-wet. I didn't uderstand the ending at all so I will withold my vote.
This looks a bit rough to me, like a diamond still partly encased in the rock that was its womb, it needs a little work. But the light is there.
I lost it in a few places but you are talking about living in a foreign land so I guess that expected
I guess he must be English.
whoa...
You mean, like in case it was full of crack, so that it wouldn't go to waste? Probably not. Though most of the rest of the neighbourhood was crack houses, this building was actually the headquarters & rehearsal space of a small theatre company and the Vancouver Ukranian society or some such non-profit. Afterwards it became a used car lot. They put up a little iron fence to keep the junkies out, and someone was always putting flowers there. The arsonist burned down 3 or 4 more non-profit organizations before they caught him. I guess he had a thing against NGOs.