Bachus
on Devil, BEWARE!!! by gay
27 Oct 2003, 7:12 PM
http://poetry.rotten.com/fingerhead/
Reminds me of the turing test (which is very topical)
Have you poked around at the transcripts from the turing tests?
Fun - they come so close, then this happens:
bot: "I like to chat with my friends, what do you like to do?"
me: "martial arts"
bot: "ouch, that hurts, don't press the keys so hard!"
me: "cute - thats actually a clever response"
bot: "Now the real truth comes out. Go on"
[splat]
Thats an actual transcript.
http://www.surrey.ac.uk/dwrc/loebner/
Yeah, he talked about the bewildered herd in "Media Control". Actually, in refering to your skill in drawing attention to the "big"issues, I was talking about the title- I mean, the title made it look like the poem would be about the abortion debate, but your poem pointed out that it is probably not THE MOST important thing, (even though it is worth arguing about and being passionate about) it is one that politicians fight about so often and it takes up so much time while other stuff, bigger stuff, slips by the public each day our elected officials meet. Not that we're talking about it, but you might be interested to know that the US Senate passed a bill last week that would make it illegal to perform partial birth abortions (including when it was deemed necessary by 2 different doctors for the mother's health). Contrary to what you might expect, Maine's 2 republican senators both voted against making it illegal.
thanks sliver :)
I like your haiku/senryu, you do a very nice job of conveying a single, not necessarily simple, thought in them.
People think that's easy. Spewing the first thing that comes into your head and bleeding bile and blood all over a page - THATS easy.
Sorry, I was spewing. Done now.
You must have me confused for someone else. I have not used that word in years.
I liked it. It speaks from the heart. May the Sacred Heart of Jesus have mercy on us.
huh//? I'm not a bitch.... you recive a nine.
thats one of the best catch phrases i have ever seen. I love it. and now im jealous of you. damn it.
Shuushin
replying on I have no problem with short people of color or religion by horus8
27 Oct 2003, 6:20 PM
No. Nothing seems to help, really.
I liked the read, btw - not sure if that came through (rushing a bit playing catch-up, sorry). Made me want to know who inspired it (not that I'm asking, that was just the effect).
Pretty excellently done. Wonderful language use and the thing is polished up quite nicely.
the use of "sanguine" gives me a little pause though - I can appreciate the aliteration it gives, and I see you've tied it in with the last stanza - but I just can't roll over it. Prolly just me. Maybe it's *because* of the alliteration with "submerged"? Maybe swap out submerged instead?
Bewildered herd? I prefer "We the Sheeple."
kindof a lyrical quality.
Not crazy about the lowercase "i"s, and maybe a tad too many cliches/term dropping - but workable methinks.
a well conveyed [senryu]; a simple sentiment.
gave me a smile.
I totally get it, but it took me a few (cuz I'm medicated).
I love cable. You should get cable (or DSL) or a modem that works.
horus8
replying on I have no problem with short people of color or religion by horus8
27 Oct 2003, 6:05 PM
No, do you?
holy shit thats alot of words - actually, its only 680 - but it felt like more. I read them all.
Quite a cathartic rant - feel better??
Y2kSlamPoet
replying on The Velvet Purse of the Universe (The Witch of Raven St.) by Don-Quixote
27 Oct 2003, 5:55 PM
oi, tsk, no worries bill, im sick in the head myself.. but i admit, i never had an inkling of what you thought the purse was sposed to be....
BUT NOW I DO! you dirty ole man. shame on you! heh.
Robosexual.
Bill Z Bub
on Jesus and the spider (Should have bought a GT 500 Glider) by Don-Quixote
27 Oct 2003, 5:05 PM
Neato.