tadpole
on sewer rat by irishfolksuicide
25 Sep 2003, 9:42 PM
never thought I could like a poem about a rat so much!
appreciate the response, thanks
Yes, I think it is your looks. But you're a lovely lass otherwise.
I, for one, am ashamed of you. This poem is a political statement that I'm making against unsafe neanderthal hotel sex. I'm sick of seeing 13 year old girls suckling their young. you sir, are an anarchist.
i c what you mean, sir.
I once lived on a foetus farm, you know. Ghastly work, especially in monsoon season. The fields were often utterly awash with unformed hearts and amniotic sacs. Of course we made do with what we had, and in fact it was my uncle who invented cheese & amnion flavoured crisps and sold the formula to Walkers (who renamed it at once). This poeme is rubbish though.
Golden Q - Tip award. For obvious reasons. 10!
wound copper. tricksy, he is. he watches us, yess, he does.
bravo!
it is refreshing to see that some of the rankers are making use of the more modern conventions.
a fine prose-pome indeed, sirrah!
-2 for cerical (sic) errors.
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replying on Pauling in Disguise (Ignorance and Arrogance) by Geschäftsreise
25 Sep 2003, 5:56 PM
thank you. I try to be as personable as possible. i fall from time to time. i appreciate any poem that introduces me to something new. thanks again.
Geschäftsreise
replying on Pauling in Disguise (Ignorance and Arrogance) by Geschäftsreise
25 Sep 2003, 5:52 PM
The comment (and other comments you've made in the past). You are generally thoughtful, humble, agreeable, etc.
You understood the poem, appreciated it and were thoughtful enough not to spoil it for others, these are good qualities.
(how often do you get compliments on poemranker, anyway?)
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replying on Pauling in Disguise (Ignorance and Arrogance) by Geschäftsreise
25 Sep 2003, 5:46 PM
might i ask why?
Geschäftsreise
replying on Pauling in Disguise (Ignorance and Arrogance) by Geschäftsreise
25 Sep 2003, 5:44 PM
I like you
last line in s-1 took a wrong turn for me. otherwise....
I won't spoil this for the others.
wordiness is an advantage. more to work with. unlike my sometimes ground-up-bones-for-a-poem style. Seriously, spend some time with this and the fox poem. both have plenty going for them. whv.
Good try, but I think my flow sounds better.
What school did you go to? I was at Eton.
How can you live with yourself knowing that you wrote this poem?
I could clarify this claptrap with a clairvoyant clang of my clavichord.