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Free verse № 66949

The Light

by the_unknown_angel83

Member since 2003 · Posted 25 Sep 2003 · 4 comments

The pain is all there. It never goes away . From the first time you did this to me. It will never be the same. My life will never be the same. You are always with me. I just want you to go away. The pain won't go away. I'll never be the same. You did this to me. I want to cry but I can't. I want you out of my head. Disappear, NOW! Why won't you listen to me. God, help me, make him go away. Your hurting me. Stop it.....please. It's the same torture over and over. Why won't you stop? You think I enjoy pain but I don't. Don't make me hurt you. I can't hurt you. I feel so helpless. I can't breathe. Why are you doing this to me? I'm trying to scream but nothing is coming out. Not this, not now. NO! STOP! All I see is....Every thing is a blur. Don't do this to me ,please. STOP! STOP! I'm fading faster and faster. I see a light , it's very bright. It hurts my eyes. I can't look at it anymore. But some how I seem drawn by it. I don't feel afraid anymore. Thank you, God for answering my parayer.

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[6] irishfolksuicide 25-Sep-03/1:00 PM Reply
like the transcription of an adolescent hissy fit.
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 25-Sep-03/3:38 PM Reply
[_] AABB rhyming scheme
[_] About drugs
[_] About romantic love
[_] About writing
[_] About suicide or self-mutilation
[_] About the author's social pastimes
[X] Arbitrary indentation
[X] Arbitrary line breaks
[_] Autobiographical but written in the third person
[X] Clerical errors
[_] Clichéd imagery (gazing out of window, tears falling like rain)
[_] Clichéd rhymes (love/above, heart/apart)
[_] Clichéd angst words (putrid, wretched)
[X] Devoid of rhyme
[X] Devoid of other linguistic embellishments (alliteration, onomatopoeia)
[X] Devoid of other literary devices (simile, synaesthesia)
[X] Devoid of wondrous or fantastical imagery
[X] Ellipses used overabundantly
[_] Insipidly whimsical or zany
[_] Internet shorthand or emoticons
[_] Leaving rant
[_] Lower case only
[_] 'Lyrics'
[_] Melodramatic
[X] Naively religious or superstitious
[_] Obsessed with femininity
[X] Pointedly unanswered questions
[_] Rage against the machine
[X] Repetition of a word or phrase to the point of nausea
[_] Sanctimonious
[X] Self-obsessed
[_] Sentimental
[_] Smugly-named protagonist
[_] Thesaurophilia
[_] Untitled
[_] Vicarious wish fulfilment

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[0] Bachus 25-Sep-03/3:59 PM Reply
Sounds like a bad case of microwaved sodomy.
[0] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? 25-Sep-03/4:38 PM Reply
How can you live with yourself knowing that you wrote this poem?