A lovely consideration.

I considered being a nice person and not hassling you about your mom (I have a target for that), thereby skipping this poem. However, I read it. You owe me thirty seconds of a perfectly miserbable life. I'd just like to say I agree with Mr. Dreamer. Also, if you held the knife above your head, the angle would likely cause the blade to bounce off your rib or more likely collarbone and you'd just cut off your tit. Not saying that wouldn't be an idea. By the way, nobody does care. Except sliver, but he doesn't count. Likely just wants in your pimply panties anyway.

"and live in fear all the while" has stresses in the wrong places. "gotta learn to defend" is missing a syllable. and same with "all your junk 'til the end"--but that you can just make "until" and it's good to go. (btw, till is used in "to till a field"), the one you're wanting is the shortened form of "until". the apostrophe replaces the "un", and there's no need to add an l. beyond that... nice, simple poem; with rhythm tweaks, I think this would be solid, and in any case is good to get out of the system. :)

Dull. Learn to spell.

Whine whine whine. What, did you break a nail? Shitty rhythm, shitty cliched images and the self pity supplied the flies and stink lines.

I think this could make a very interesting painting; you definitely got enough imagery there. I stumble for cadence on the second line. If I had a 'personal favorites' section implemented, this would be added to it just for the picture I'm seeing. On the off chance that I'd try to paint it someday. meanwhile, I'll just make a note to myself on skwerms.org. :) 7, still, for its slight awkwardness, and I don't see it going over an 8, for content. odd, that.

:snaps fingers:

Girl on girl action that fails to even harden one nipple. FAIL!

Nice. I like the Berserk one.

I give it Two thumbs DOWN!!

Nice one. Very nice indeed.

Cute but pointless. I must admit..I did laugh at the 3rd verse. Yes Mysterious one.....me again! Happy to see me?

Not you again!