youshu? :)

last stanza should have been cut out. :P

oh, you'll know when I will be coming. Trust me, you'll know...

I'm not so advanced yet. But I shall work on it. :) Often my attempts at (image rich) straight-forwardness become such stretched contrivances that they carry nothing. Any attempt at hidden gems would unceremoniously collapse such a makeshift structure. Hmm. There should be a poem in that. ;)

(smile) - Should've left the acrostic tag to the observant eye. Always build trap doors and secret entrances and hidden treasures into your poetry, I say.

not like im one with much taste for haiku, but you shouldnt yammer about anything.. your work isnt great, funny, or anything: its pseudo-teenage whining. so shut up.

"You have no right to critisize my work." If you post your "poetry" on a poetry-ranking site, everyone who reads it has the right to criticise it. If you're such a spineless crybaby you can't take it when people rightly tell you you can't write, maybe interaction with other people isn't for you. Instead, try writing your poetry in a special secret diary with a flying unicorn pony on a rainbow in space on the front where nobody else can read it. You clearly have no idea what this haiku is about, and you're clearly only attacking it because razorgrin was a meanie to you. You, sir, are a dunce.

my first acrostic. :)

well, shes part of the ringling brothers now! YEEHAAAW