tadpole
on Recycle by Patsy
7 Sep 2003, 9:58 AM
(same comment as for your "30,000 Feet" poem)
I don't really understand it but part of it I find myself liking. . .what is it all about?
I like how it flows. . .but suggest that maybe the last line should be directed elsewhere.
How do you write like that! I really like how you almost trick the reader to think you are talking about something else and then leave them with a tear in their eye. . .well at least me
So, I revised it a bit, but don't get your hopes up.
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on Babelfish Poetry (I): A pérola (Português) by Geschäftsreise
7 Sep 2003, 7:19 AM
Welcher Fremdsprache? Nicht italienisch oder spanisch?
Du bist kein Deutscher, Freund. Keine "Infidelity" von diese Sprache. "Infidelity" ist Ehebruch. Aber, deine Nummern sagen "vergelten", und Ehebrecher.
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on Babelfish Poetry (II): Rendu plus Doux (Français) by Geschäftsreise
7 Sep 2003, 6:45 AM
beau, dans cela a maladroitement traduit la manière.
A cheesemonger would only sell cheese, wheras a cheesesmith would make it. Also, the cheesemonger would conduct his business from a shop, and therefore have no need for a cheese shed.
pain is a gift?
Army? What? Nadda. I thought about it, realized oh wait, I like thinking for myself and said fuck that.
incredible, good work, very emotional, write more
What did you mean by "thick and thin"?
I'm much better than everything.
is this grandfather? is this poem about grandfather's vest????
joe--watch your mouth. nobody deserves that. nobody.
honed.
vermicular in a very good way
10.
shadowaura
on Babelfish Poetry (II): Rendu plus Doux (Français) by Geschäftsreise
6 Sep 2003, 7:49 PM
jonas
Von der einfachen Unzufriedenheit zum völligen infidelity. Glauben Sie an karma? Ich auch nicht.