shadowaura
replying on Goodbye by shadowaura
5 Sep 2003, 4:09 PM
will do.
Powerful, moving, undulating, vertiginous.
I can too. lol. I wouldn't define it as drivel though.
Dark you can go sit on this poem man. Or maybe you and your chrissy bitches are out burning more innocent people and calling them witches. Too busy to admit that what you really enjoy is a good book shuved up your ASS!
God damn you, i was only trying to be nice. You don't have to bite my fucking head for liking your poetry. Damn it, i'm in abad mood now, so much for being friendly in the dying world.
liked it, what else do you got?
Frisky, are we? Well we shall see. Until then i will concede. This is some of your finest. Atleast in the last nine months. Congratulations. I have to go to Tahoe for a spell, see you in a couple of days. 10.
Neither... It died.
This poem is Skill
Your name however remains gay
Chutneybuttfuck
Today I accidentally burnt a piece of toast, and as such I was then in possession of a burned piece of toast.
pretty good
PS ignore SupremeDreamer it's better that way
cute, though I think "dis" in the title is overkill. And peeved seems a rather... weak feeling, considering.
Though I must say I prefer this one. You should submit it. :)
cute.
so now I ask what has you flying ot these pastures new, eh? what can _The Critical Poet_ do for you that poemranker can't? Hell, we can even flag you a wanker for all to see an' it move you. :)
la.
This is good. While it has obviously offended some, no one can deny that it's a good poem. ^_^
How would you suggest?
To me I could change change the title and end it after "Run, moving quick as stone." line. Or you could leave the title the same and just leave a lot unsaid for the reader to decide.
Can't wait to see what you were thinking.
Indeed it was. Not sure what I was thinking. I'm reading it all over now... and see many reasons not to end it like that. Why is there still a door jam to go under if the walls have fallen down. If someone is caged, chained, in a prison of some sort why is there a door jam near them.
Thanks for pointing that out..made me look at it and see what was wrong.
==Doylum
replying on Slimshady Meets Cali Hillbilly (I Don An Afro) by SupremeDreamer
5 Sep 2003, 7:29 AM
Cos you look like them
Are you the Pet Shop Boys?