horus8
replying on To Mom by Brittanyy
22 Aug 2003, 8:24 PM
Let me get this straight. You have two votes a 6 and a 7, which in all due respect should be a 3 and a 4, but me, and my pal the 'dream' were feeling very giving at that moment and empathetic to your obvious state of current retardation. And you are calling us "mean"? Though you're the one that just went upstairs and stabbed yourself due to a lack of communication and self pity. Sweet heart, it is you that is being a bit to hard on yourself. What you've written here is not a poem it is a bloody pair of teenage cotton briefs.
That's nothing I rhymed Hep C with pepsi last month and broke the moons wind, in half. It was very romantic.
The definative cocksucking poem is one I wrote a long while back, entitled "tender cock of morning": http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.j
You know for an old woman, you say buddy just like a guy (but gay and jewish with a toupee) with a mouthfull of pennys.
From Poseidon, Aphrodite appeared,
Eyes aquamarine, and true as the dawn.
From her virgin flesh all wave horses reared,
As an Ocean bowed when she walked upon.
Immaculate goddess of men's delight,
Embrace me as if I was Hephaestus
After fire pounding steel all day and night.
My mouth to yours, my hands to your discus'.
But my loss serves the will of the sky God
Your uncle loves you enough to kill me.
As the storm brings me down I find it's odd
that love between men and gods cannot be.
My love and my life to you I bequeeth
I am yours out at sea just underneath.
AN ORIGINAL OBSERVATION! AN ORIGINAL TITLE! The poem however, gave me gas the equivelant of a four day old wet burritto. When you got to the part where the city was in the backdrop, I thought, "wow" he' so poetic. Then I laughed, and went and took a short shit.
Elizabeth Taylor failed miserably.
Feeling okay? Today I auditioned in speedos and when I bent over my hernia popped up my hemhoroid popped over and a baby mouse cried.
Is amp.
Hilarious, as funny as birdman's hero poem easilly.
Bone hiss rocks. Superb poetry.
you helped big time (finger space)
Be my guest, your the greek and its my 1st sonnet so so your thang please
nicely done, sir
A really brave attempt. I could edit this.
1. I would like to note that there is no such thing as P.I.Y.M. Syndrome, so this is purely a girl thing 2. Tell you what - if I don't let you go down on me I'll buy you a truck stop for your birthday 3. I just bought the gayest, coolest shirt ever 4. I'm off to the gym now but first 4. I should ask Jeremi for relationship advice.
The sad thing is Z I was reading up about her and everthing was going great until I read one theory was that she originated from Uranus, I mean how can that be erotic? I will ask dark angel about the sand in the crotch bit and from what I saw of the few pictures of Aphrodite she looks a B cup at max but I found the sonnet quite difficult this whole 4-4-4-2 thing looks easy but easy it aint.
I will think about her breasts and know what your getting at and can see a different version unfolding like -Q- in my head.
Fanks for reading
The sad thing is Z I was reading up about her and everthing was going great until I read one theory was that she originated from Uranus, I mean how can that be erotic? I will ask dark angel about the sand in the crotch bit and from what I saw of the few pictures of Aphrodite she looks a B cup at max but I found the sonnet quite difficult this whole 4-4-4-2 thing looks easy but easy it aint.
I will think about her breasts and know what your getting at and can see a different version unfolding like -Q- in my head.
Fanks for reading.
cad--nice first try. but. why. do. you. insist. on. writing. with. a. different. voice. than. the. one. you. speak. with., just. because. it's. a. sonnet???
see how fucking annoying that is?
don't try to be so noble. tell me about her breats, and how they mounded up, wet and lustrous, like pearls. tell me about the tangle of arame that dresses her..erm, 'cavern'... tell me about the sand in your crotch.
that's what i want to hear.