god'swife
on A Circle Starts with C by rusty
6 Aug 2003, 8:14 AM
Charmng but needs work. "They both giggle" is too vague, even if we can assume it's the floor and mattress. You said it so many times, say it once more. L4 is incomprehensible, and believe me I can understand some obscure stuff, but this is beyond beyond. end it with the mattress somehow. You lying on it contemplating, the mattress comforting you. Again, charming.
thank you very much. I think people aren't seeing what I'm trying to do. I feel that to talk about something you must first understand it. How can you talk of rape (not that any of these poems do) in a peaceful way. Life is more then a shell. I just hope that my humble words can express emotions larger then myself.
is there anyone in the woprld who doesn't think that pony-boy george is saving the big guns for november? for the elections? because from where i sit, he's not got a chance to make it back into the oval office. first, that nepotistic hand job that slid him into the big chair, second, despite what the media portray, most of us over here never wanted this fucking hostility to begin with. it's a disgrace the way he's big-ballsing his way across the planet.
hey man i know how it is, just dont kill me..... :)-9
0... not even worth pondering
true... 10... reminds me of jimi hendrix though
water's good... 10
hehe... everyone dreams of dying.. 10
'tis ok... 7
Good clean pining sonnet.
The last time I did that... It had one eye and a beard with a stinky incoherant mumble.
What, four arabs with straight razors in a plane bound for buildings full of people wasn't massive enough for you? Stick around, you'll get your fucking weapons of mass destruction in one form or another, and then you'll be arguing some other lightless angle. Wake up, how many ways can you cook chicken? Well that's how many ways that we can get cooked by these rock a bye jehova witnesses minus the smiles and shower.
Its interesting how this comment was posted at 08:32pm and the last vote cast was 08:32pm, it was not even in the best list up until that point and now it is so you must have voted it highly intentionally or not.
Please feel free PAKI to vote it 0 like you do with all my poems.
I hate inconsistency after all, go on make my day punk.
Mr Pig
replying on On waiting to pick up my daughter on Tuesday by poetandknowit
6 Aug 2003, 2:11 AM
I disagree his writing is superior to 99% of people on here. I find his work boring, and unappealing. He can hardly support he is superior when his average weighted mark is quite low. We all get voted of the best list often but he's never up there to vote off. I really think he could do with a reality check and actually see the facts, that statistically he is the weakest link - goodbye PAKI.
(And that whole Ha Ha Ha Ha Ha Ha thing makes me feel sorry for him, even his comments are boring).
The last stanza fails to surmise the gist of your message. Perhaps, close with another observation on the drink that you're writing about.
are you depressed?
online journal
ummm..... actually most noam chompsky, jello biafra. nofx is my favorite band, but my political postion was before nofx was a band with a political opinion. but i was very pleased with their recent efforts.