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poetandknowit on Lethal Weapon by poetandkonwit 3 Aug 2003, 1:09 AM
Matt, Matt, Matt. Here I was all geared up for some fine and biting satire at my own expense and all you give me is Gordon Lightfoot. I thought Canadians are supposed to have a better educational system then the US, smarter undergrads and all. You have the statistics somewhere! But wait, you have to finish the new Mega Man video game before you can reveal them. You go for my dear dead mother again? What is the point? What are you after there? I am glad she is still weighing on your mind after so many months considering she was quite the woman. So, what kind of Canadian are you? Oh yes, the kind that hang out with other folks that get a kick out of watching 3000 people die. All while you and the gang are sitting around mommy and daddy's pool living the good life. Free health care and all. Oh yes, I remember. Is this really all you can muster? I mean are you really lacking sleep so much that your brain has fizzled to the point of no longer speaking in anything but D&D lingo and Barenaked Ladies lyrics. There is no subtext hidden beneath Be My Yokon Ono, I swear. Your mother will die one day, you know. And it may be from the likes of cancer. And you will have to sit and watch her rot away right in front of your eyes and you will come back to this site and read my dear dead mommy poems and cry yourself to sleep at night. She will piss out her own bile. Do you know what bile looks like? It is this brown goop. Dark brown. And looks like a runny shit but it is coming straight out of the liver into a little bag. And your mother will turn to you and look at you the only way a mother can look at the son she gave birth to and let you know that she cannot take it anymore. And maybe you will run across the entire fucking world looking for just one doctor. Just one who will say MAYBE? Maybe we can get a handle on this. But he will be the most unfeeling human on the earth and guinea pig your mother who I assume you love. And then she will leak from the incisions, it will be every place, and no matter how many towels you pull from the closet it will not be enough. And you will think to yourself, does the body really have this much shit in it. If there were really a god, wouldn't he/she have simplified things a bit? So, you are up to your knees in it. You mother is begging you to make it stop. To make everything stop, but you are ill equipped. You are unprepared to deal with this. And then you will have to deal with the hallucinations in the middle of the night as she is dying right in front of you. You had better start praying to Geddy Lee right now, my friend. Because karma has a way of crawling through locked doors.
impert&ent on A Circle Starts with C by rusty 3 Aug 2003, 12:15 AM
I like the insane rhythm. The sense that the floor is heaving and pitching; that houshold objects have overcome inertia and are now in rebellion.
SupremeDreamer on Grampa Morris by http://bandgeek 2 Aug 2003, 11:55 PM
well done. blessed with 10.
rusty on Grampa Morris by http://bandgeek 2 Aug 2003, 10:52 PM
very powerful: the images the emotions. When reading poetry it is always hard to not think of the writer as protagonist. I must say I enjoyed this especially the end there is a childlike essence that is so desperate in us all.
rusty on Anouk by daniella 2 Aug 2003, 10:46 PM
I enjoy the connection and compassion in this poem the use of the flower and the horizon. It's always nice to see affection in a real sense.
rusty on Mi Casa es Su Casa by <~> 2 Aug 2003, 10:40 PM
I wanted to change my comment given the state I was in last time. I like the use of romance and then the line "I take whatever comes to me" it's a wonderful vision that everything is prey and a meal. I would almost like to see more of that through out the poem. My question is what formula, there physical strength or the ability to make a thread? I must say the last line draws me in very much and I left feeling whole.
awesome work. kick the 0 people where it hurts!!!
justjay on Mind Puddle by justjay 2 Aug 2003, 9:09 PM
i specifically put the periods in. i want pauses at the ends of the sentence. i personally wanted to slow down the reader. make them think about what they were reading. i never noticed you could only put 3 poems a week so i didn't even start with my personal favorite poems. but wait till next week.
That is dark justice. Group therapy anyone?
http://mulberryfairy on POEM XXII by DonCalo 2 Aug 2003, 7:37 PM
So, you were so over the top horny that you came in your pants and turned the other person off? I really can't tell what extinguished your audience's craving.
Sweet. Better metaphors and descriptions on this one.
http://mulberryfairy on Perfection by justjay 2 Aug 2003, 7:31 PM
Keep thinking. "When you smile, You light up the room." has been written by every poet in their early work, but you can think of a different, better metaphor.
http://mulberryfairy on Mind Puddle by justjay 2 Aug 2003, 7:25 PM
Interesting. The periods seem a little arbitrary.
http://mulberryfairy replying on Malcontent by EAger to Offend 2 Aug 2003, 7:21 PM
You are right, it isn't a George W. word if you KNOW it is not a real word. I love the uniquity of your vocabulary.
http://mulberryfairy replying on marriage by bearhead 2 Aug 2003, 7:20 PM
I think it's better, I could see your dilemma of whether to write bells and knells in the same phrase, but this works.
http://mulberryfairy replying on marlon by bearhead 2 Aug 2003, 7:09 PM
I was thinking "rabid", but I don't have your vision of what it looks like.
INTRANSIT on Lethal Weapon by poetandkonwit 2 Aug 2003, 6:14 PM
poetand KOnwit? Boy, I can't wait to see THIS smackdown.
<~> on Lethal Weapon by poetandkonwit 2 Aug 2003, 6:13 PM
shit. you got me! hahahaha!!! wank!
<~> replying on Lethal Weapon by poetandkonwit 2 Aug 2003, 5:58 PM
it means he asks me if i slept naked.
Let me tell you, when your super dreamin a girlfriend, thats the sign that youve gone too far and need a super large dose of reality.. ;) go out get some pussy.