SupremeDreamer
on Perfection by justjay
2 Aug 2003, 1:58 PM
cherry on top of a well iced cake..
wheres the meat? heh. 8.
cloths or clothes? take your pick. dont worry, i make a million spelling mistakes in a day. well done, i enjoyed reading it. 8
we can always sell the idea to webster.. ;)
verboten.. forbidden love.. ah.. cool, i learned a new word. Nice poem, welcome to ranker ville. blessed with nine.
Shit, this really is about SHIT. All the stool! Maybe a good enema may help you out, a cleaning of this stupid ass might be a good thing. Stuff the hose down your throat, eventually it will reach that anal opening of yours.
<YOUR JUST LIKE MY MOTHER, TALK IS CHEAP, CHEAP! (YOU'RE?) WHORE.> Dear old mom did a great job. READ MY LIPS, you're writing, for lack of a better word really does suck, almost as badly as your guitar playing. That slicked back hair, like Slick Willy, must be from all those wet farts, smeared into the scalp. Get a life, read some REAL books. Turn that 8mm camera off, and maybe choke your chicken in front of the Playboy chanel. But please enough of the fucking nonsense.
Pardon my ignorance but, what the hell does "I flatter z" mean? Aside from that it speaks to me.
What similes, as well. this is fun. I wouln't hold "crazy" against you for this, as it sounds appropriately neanderthal.
George W...Bush? How about "weapons of ass destruction"?
The difference would be that I know it's incorrect. But, don't you think it belongs in the dictionary? It's so much lighter than "uniqueness". I don't know. I need suggestions!!!
I've always found it fun to birth new words. Especially when nobody else knows the meaning.
pooky
Sir, your new glasses obviously have confused a raisen for your divinity complex-ion.
Great. A little on the prosey side with your grammatical, complete sentences (not that I can talk).
EAger to Offend
on A Dreamers Cookery: Cosmic Gardener [edited] by SupremeDreamer
2 Aug 2003, 12:03 PM
Maybe just "Dynomite fishermen wanted" as if in a classified ad. Also, immolation to me implies "sacred".
I love the ending with the plum instead of an apple. A good thinking work here. I'll vote later when my thought is complete.
Uniquity is a George W. word.
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on A Dreamers Cookery: Cosmic Gardener [edited] by SupremeDreamer
2 Aug 2003, 11:58 AM
Yeah! You left out an apostrophe in "mother earth's womb."
Good job, I like the way the shift from happiness to doom seems so quick, like in real life marriages. I don't think "knell" works there as knell is a kind of sound more than something you can ring. Saying smile and smiling two lines in a row was a little too close together.