Re: Fragrant Love by Engelbert Humpalot	Holy Tits 195.194.75.209	18-Jan-07/7:38 AM
How reminiscent of my own family. Very fucking amusing.
Re: do androids dream? by nentwined	Holy Tits 195.194.75.209	18-Jan-07/7:38 AM
How fucking deep. You sound like a Californian. I can be no more insulting than that.
Re: A Fart For All Mankind by Edna Sweetlove	Holy Tits 195.194.75.209	18-Jan-07/7:37 AM
Very clever. I love farting.
Re: Brackish by <~>	Holy Tits 195.194.75.209	18-Jan-07/7:37 AM
A bit long.
Re: California triolets by zodiac	Holy Tits 195.194.75.209	18-Jan-07/7:36 AM
I thought this was about toilets. It would have ben better if it had been.
Re: whilst the bells ring by richa	Holy Tits 195.194.75.209	18-Jan-07/7:35 AM
Are you fucking serious? This is truly awful. Childish trash. Oh dear.
Re: I'm a faggot by mrs smith	Holy Tits 195.194.75.209	18-Jan-07/7:34 AM
Surreal
Re: Wreck of the Poor Anchor by Dovina	some deleted user 64.140.228.50	18-Jan-07/5:21 AM
No constructive critisism to offer. I quite like tis as it is.
Re: Stripping the willow by ecargo	some deleted user 64.140.228.50	18-Jan-07/5:15 AM
My talent in writing poetry is nowhere near comparable to yours, therefore I can offer no constructive critisism on this poem. All I can offer is my vote for an excellent piece of work.
Re: Stripping the willow by ecargo	Dovina 208.127.72.211	17-Jan-07/7:55 PM
“Pound your swords into plowshares,” your spears into sickles, which do burn more naturally in the hands. Strange, using the British spelling of plow. Suggest “murmuring” replace the obscure “sough.” Suggest conventional sentence structure in the last one, as done in the others.
Re: a comment on Brains for Barter by Dovina	Dovina 208.127.72.160	17-Jan-07/1:55 PM
ok, lol, seriousness not expected.
Re: a comment on Wreck of the Poor Anchor by Dovina	Dovina 208.127.72.160	17-Jan-07/1:52 PM
And thanks again for commenting on the poem, instead of using it for a soap box.
Re: I heart you by thetrev	ecargo 167.219.88.140	17-Jan-07/12:32 PM
Pretty good, original. I like your nouns acting as verbs--they work in a weird and very cool way; it's what gives this a unique twist I think. Overall, focused, sharp, though the parenthetical bits distract, detract from the whole, I think.
Re: almost 12.30 by Dental Panic	ecargo 167.219.88.140	17-Jan-07/12:26 PM
Hi DP. This is like an amuse bouche--tasty but leaves one wanting more. Full of suggestive (in a nonprurient sense) little oddities that seem to imply more, more--the last line lost me though. And I'm not sure what the tie-in with Genesis is (assuming that's why you referenced it in your amusing exchange with our resident longbeard/provocateur)--but I can be dense about such things.
Re: He's... by holliebollie_19	Shuushin 63.167.136.250	17-Jan-07/7:07 AM
I'd rather you write often, rather than worry too much about writing well, at this stage of the game.
Re: The Hell With Growing Up by wilco	holliebollie_19 66.203.40.234	17-Jan-07/6:51 AM
Your poem is very good. thanks for the comments and tips.
Re: a comment on He's... by holliebollie_19	holliebollie_19 66.203.40.234	17-Jan-07/6:48 AM
If you really don't want to be mean, try and give me ideas to write about. I did write this during study hall because I was bored. So make fun of me all you want, and you can shove it up yuor butt.
Re: He's... by holliebollie_19	holliebollie_19 66.203.40.234	17-Jan-07/6:45 AM
THis poem is about Brady.
Re: I heart you by thetrev	Shuushin 63.167.136.250	17-Jan-07/6:20 AM
not the usual fare, I like it overall. it either needs to be about a third shorter, or twice as long - you pick.
Re: Hello Rockmage!! by SupremeDreamer	Shuushin 63.167.136.250	17-Jan-07/6:01 AM
Greets and Congratulations.