Odelay

i really like this one. good work.

omg please stop with the I's WE GET IT!

quite sweet, I like the flow some of the rhymes seem a bit forced though

If you are going to use the same rhyme sound for every line you should probably not repeat words night and sight. The words are a bit simple too. Check out 'I am the gayest' i think by Dark angel for an example of this form (in best list)

hehe that is truly funny. i might have deleted them, but at least i read them. ; ) 10

Donnie: I promise one day everything will be better for you.

"You're born" "You're hear torn" ahh the life sucks poem take some tylenol chase it with a shot of cuervo and hit the sack it'll be all better tommorow Dr. Lilian Thurman: The search for God is absurd? Donnie: It is if everyone dies alone. (donnie darko)

This poem started off as a poem of respect and i do still respect you but you deleted my comments?! and it wasn't even that mean I was helping you out :( *tear

Aww....*sniff* it is a very sweet poem. heh your doing better than me. I keep getting belittled. Oh well i don't care really.

Oh you are a naughty person. hehe. i need a fan. lmao. i love it though. = )

I guess many have a set mind in what poetry should be eh? lol. I laugh at all the pathetic fools who think poetry should be a certain way. Poetry is a expression of one's heart and soul. Of course that is just my thought. here is a ten QT. = )

i'm drunk and it made me shiver great job

remember to eat a sandwich afterwards with some skittles