DreamerSupreme
on 2838 Denise Dr. Troy, Mi. by Bachus
6 Jul 2003, 2:41 PM
Well, things were great untill the dogs death lol.. 7.
Its like painting a scene with words. You really got the juices boiling today aye? 10.
damn.. i cant say anything else.. 10.
The irony, obviously. We are the locusts capable of moving from planet to planet doing just what it is we supposedly are resisting. That and timing, because it's unquotable hollywood crap being used by a poet to repoint the finger, I believe, makes the piece entirely different from the way you're viewing it. It made me laugh at every line.
I sense some internal personalization occuring. lol.
Now this love poem is... refreshing.. love poems needed a spice, a tune up... damned good mechanic you are. 9.
Ah, well, whether horus here wrote this piece to make fun of your poem or not, makes no difference really concerning my opinion. Its funny in EITHER case. And muse, you need to relax, before your head explodes.. because ole horus only becomes inspired to make more poetic jokes about your poems when you complain like some two year old.. cmon now..
Does being BI-Polar mean you have no sense of humor? if thats the case, then you are INDEED handicapped. And i WILL dream on mam, because my dreams get fed as ink into my pen, and become the words in my poems.
<{Baba^Yaga}>
replying on I am talented & good looking damnit! by <{Baba^Yaga}>
6 Jul 2003, 11:06 AM
It's coming, your video store will have them "celebration" and "character" have you seen "dancer in the dark"?
Smart poem.
Over all i enjoyed the poem, but i think the piece before ...death is confusing to a point.. or thats my opinion anyway. heres a 7.
Damn good. Very descriptive and well worded. blessed with 10.
Yep, I love this poem.. muse did some strange whine on my poetic soup comments section about not wanting to vote because of his/hers work being mutilated.. and when i saw this, i laughed my ass off in joy.. blessed with a 10, good fucking job!!!
lol.. yeah. still have wierd thoughts that i am settle? i hope not after looking at the ips, because then id start to feel like alice in wonderland, where i dont know who i am or where i am. nice poem, heres a 10.
Good suggestions, but im going to keep those parts as i originaly wrote them. Thanks for your thoughts though, they are always appreciated.
Huh? *mutilated*? how have I mutilated your work? I don't remember voting for it, but its possible I did, and whatever rank I gave it was my opinion, I don't rank poems badly just because I wish to -mutilate- them. Plus I am pretty slack when it comes to voting. I'm no where near as tough a voter as most others in ranker ville here, so unless your poem struck me as badly written, or written in a way i find tasteless or without any brilliance, etc, it probly didn't get a harsh rating from me.
Looking at your stigma poem, its is not something that would cause me to rip it to pieces via vote.. but whatever, its your choice on whether or not you should vote, but if its because your poem didnt get a good rating, then thats fucking idiotic..
'the dead are unborn' well summed up
lots of things to make you think here
No you misunderstand.
L-dopa was a drug that seemed to arrest the development of parkinsons disease.
However unbeknown to pharmacologists (quacks compared to real medics) the side effects were the overabundance of dopamine in the brain. Which caused many of those treated to develop schizophrenia.
My degree is in psychology, and this explanation is very weak. But I think you should get the gist
With your name figures you'd like it. Thanks.
One of your best.
While I don't necessarily object to adaptation (some of the finest poems have been birthed in such a fashion), there ought to be some effort put into the finished product. I see little evidence of such. No enjambment, no typographical changes. For all I know, you could have very well copy-and-pasted this from a web page. What's the difference between this and plagiarizing Shakespeare, Milton, Ginsberg, or Atwood?