Shardik
on Roadside Testimony by groovenmove
9 Jun 2003, 4:05 PM
Nice drive Shaft
I thought this poem was very beautiful. ^_^ To me, it sounds like it's about a woman who is waiting to have a baby, and it really displays alot of emotion. The imagery is wonderful, and I love the symbolism. This is very nice... ^_^
his knobby hands riding your hips?
I'm confused by this image,
like a coin operated horse at the supermarket?
that implies a climbing on, straddling motion, which confuses me, wouldn't the woman be straddling? Not the man's hands...
I'm confused.
I like the poem, but I am confused.
That'd be awesome.
Sound
How about I record this?
That, or close to a freeway.
An Unfortunate Gybing Incident (Horror) by -=Dark_Angel=-
Ready about! Lee ho!
*squelch*
O Jesu, what have I done....
well, flip! Thanks for the catch. Intently watching my subject and rythm, stepped right over it. Ever persuing the elusive iamb.
It's not often I side with Dark Angel, but he's right. Dead people might be admitted to heaven, but they don't become angels. Angels are the original inhabitants of God's kingdom who existed before the creation of Man. See Milton's 'Paradise Lost' for the full story, or any other book which pushes such whimsical bilgewater.
'Love the atmosphere', that's supposed to say.
Olve the atmospher, the old farmer and all... I think it's possibly a little too preciously descriptive for my tastes, especially the clouds, but I'm an curmudgeonly old puritan about things like adverbs and adjectives. The casual cruelty of the farmer is very Heathcliffian in a bathetic kind of way. A nice touch.
Very graceful (though watch spelling - 'futres'). Lovely alliteration of t and l in the middle stanza, you realy feel the tension and equilibrium there.
I had Zebra rubbers on my headgear. I hated braces.
EY DUMB CUNTS GET A LIFE! DARK ANGEL UR POEMS MAN ILL SPIT ON THEM. Lets all go kill ourselves and b gothic little tirds like u fukn stoopid ho!
No.
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Call my wife and tell her about Moo Gai Pengs and I
could be
Call my wife and tell her of me and Moo Gai Pengs
to at least leave somewhat of a rhyme going
Slander is the spoken word so it'd be Libel, cause this is print. It might be, depends on your perspective. I see it as a clever way of calling myself a Jackass, but hey whatever flips your pancake <~>.