classic. love the coffee reference

hahaha so ture, butr the pimple poets have so much emotion. -8

You be motivated, I give you that Plus I give you this too -8- From the blind deaf and mute

Not bad - Not great. The title goes well with the lyrics. Sometimes certain words that were meant to rhyme didn't. It's hard to explain -- it's like you tried a little to hard to rhyme in didn't come through. Good overall -7-

Pretty good - amusing at first -- a very strong beginning but i think it ended a little rocky - if u revise it a little with a different ending it might be a 10 -- "8"

I felt like this didn't hold my attention too well. Its not bad but it is lacking in some aspect that I feel could be there but isn't(I have no clue what it is either and thats driving me nuts). Its held back when it needs to read more smooth and sexy like a coffee house music. -5-

The first verse up to the last 2 lines are good, as are the last two verses but the second verse doesnt work really -the first line is good i dont think you need 'groan' in the second line. 'Song' and 'along' ryhme a bit too obviously too. But it is a very good idea and i like the structure and some of the lines are great! especialy the last 2 lines on verses 3 and 4. :o)

Sweet and well put together

interesting. almost too random. i can't quite get a hold of it. you have some wicked lines in there though. 6

hmmm. its good. its kind of the same old same old though. if it was written with more poetical oomph it might gain a better vote from me. 4

haha. this is beautiful. 8.

thats a really interesting idea. i like it. 7

TORTIONAL OVULE BLANKET

Cackbird squats on autumn leaves Beneath the groin where heirloom weaves And morsels plucked with rolled-up sleeves Forget their pants and borrow Steve's This bird now knows just what it means To write something that doesn't scan, or so it seems

Yes. But you could you keep your stupid fucking name out of my taco salad?

i really like this. it made me laugh, plus it's good poetry. it reads really smoothly...except for the "fairies, too". it just gave me a jolt like "wait a second..oh fairies..". with a better transition it would be simply wonderful! (you could even make it "my, what a big heart you have"...it seems even funnier to me) 7

Don't thank her. Not that she isn't the best thing since a tuna melt, but it ruins your poem's bottom and some people are judgemental and bias. Other than that. Hilarious. Talking about GW though, She's the first person in my life that stepped through the membrane of what true love or real love is and offered to help me stay sober. Not that no one cares. It's just a lot of work and there is an exhausting amount of communication involved in helping a realy resourceful and brilliant person get off of hard candy. It takes a lot of love, and trust in a situation were you might be the only one there that still has the ability to do that 'trust' and 'love' you know what i mean? She's my friend, and I know that she loves me, and oddly enough. That's something I'm just grasping, weird huh. Life is crazy like that, but yesterday I saw my three year old son's first soccer game (he's three) and i was sober, and i only smoked two cigarettes. lol, but ah, that's big in my mind right now. 1 week sober. I have a really special circle of friends, and my son may totally suck right now at soccer, god bless his tiny little man legs, (he's great at the sax though!) atleast now I can participate on a level that's rational and benificial for everyone. I was great at soccer and still am, he needs me. We can do it. together. lol. that should be my speech at the na aa olympics this year. Oh well, what ever.