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on Whales by Jeremi B. Handrinos
1 May 2003, 10:44 PM
nice from a leo, whales are safe.
what of a lion in a dog pit.
just finished a good read from clive barker.
ask me.
i am glad to see you don't change.
its as good as mine.
yeah i made some adjustments earlier this week...they're posted now. i know what you mean about something holding it back. ive been struggling with this piece for a few weeeks now. if you still feel that way with the new changes (i still do) let me know...you just might be the thing that will set this poem free. also...the last poem i did...which one do you mean? ive written more on my sunset conversation poem...if thats what you meant. its posted as a separate version.
I'll bring my magnum pi shorts and tri band colored tube socks and a copy of less than zero on tape (beta) and we'll listen to the psychadelic furs and sniff coke off of hookers named motiffa and density and Lavernously Squirrely.
Unless you mean fruit trees. Then, not only is this ace! It's litmus!?
Way to go! I sense the evil eggdrop soup in you too, Puke Skyfocker.
Very nice. That moment you can feel when everything changes, well captured.
great use of "o'clock" to rhyme with "clock"!!!!!
one moment to the other, groin,
by way of circumcision;
trousers down I shout "Purloin!"
and pray for close precision.
I like the way you've used the condom as a metaphor for your face. My face is moist and supple.
cool, care to elaborate? thanks
I suggest you not wear your poetry with sandals and socks lest you never get to draft the number, the second, the two. 2. 2. and after the sweaty and defilingly manic laborous second draft, will you go for three the third the 3. I pray you will Mikius. If not for you then for your kin.
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Not as shit as Oxford, by jove - we gave them an utter bosching at rugger last term!
fuckin funny HA HA HA HA HA....6
Really not my cup of tea, but I appreciate your poem as it stands.4
Wale's are shit at rugby too. I liked the end,it made a nice change.4
moi, j'adore l'homme de pomme de terre.
Good this, a poem using the most basic words arranged
(so basic even I can translate it)
Like this, worthy of haiku
Will Smith right?
Remember me when you are president