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on Severe Acute Respiratory Syndrome by Stephen Robins
17 Apr 2003, 4:05 AM
in other words, ah-ah-achoooo!
it's about youth, I think. I give you a 5
Its crazy 6
Asian sluts rock beavis.
if it would work better, tell me. im totally open...capitalization has only not worked in most of my other stuff. theres no bad time to start!
And a ten, a "smil" and a ten. Make that eleven. ele'en is one more then ten.
Garret? Would you say that refering to your self as a 'blurryphotograph' is a sighn of low self esteem or high self esteem (sigmund, is in the corner gacking a line, Jung is polishing his telescope on the veranda) Garret! Garret! but Garret has passed out again with the stove on and blackening macoroni and cheese 'a' flame. fine, it's not a sign, or metaphor, for self mutilation imaginitavely or physically, i'm sure everything is 'a' okay upstairs with our Rachel. Sig Heil!
Rachel, are you a blurry photograph?
"Solider"!!!!! GOD DAMNIT! HAND SALUTE! atteas "solider". you're excused.
(sometimes I look at my younger brothers and sister and openly weep for the future, kids just aint bright no mo'e by gershoewitz)
I am not a post apocalyptic poet. Jared Leto is, apparently. I have a moog synthesizer and a theramin processor, I'm pre-apocalyptic w/whip cream ala' rainbert sprinklai, kind sir.
may you fall from a cliff for many seconds out of the field of view until a poof of dust...well, poofs!
10..because i say so..
What a killer ending..
i hate rhyming..but this was actually cool..
Actually, the last two lines were cool..
i'll widen my vocabulary, and give you a 5.
I totally wish i hadn't given your other poems 10s..or 9s...or whatever...because i think this blows them ALL away..
I might have to think about this for awhile..because..i can't decide whether captitalization would work better for this one..I know it's not your style..but sometimes they flow better..or whatever..
I LOVE THIS!..mmm 10..i am thinking..
this is a piece of third grade crap in my opinion.
theres nothing about it that will stand out, that will make me remember it. its something i might have read before from some lovestruck wanna be elementary school poet. try again, my dear. 0.
Kinda cRaZy but then i guess thats the whole point huh?
Sometimes on this site i start to wonder how at what point does something stop being a poem and just because the writer says its a poem does that mean it actually is or is it just some words strung together?
just a thought.
Well, the poem is unremarkable and Zionism makes me sick. I add to the pile of zeros my vote.
nice original use of language
but at times a bit distant
Cute, short and too the point
I'll give you a 7 but its nearing an eight
I guess poemranker must be a bit congested as im the first to rank this