Bill Z Bub
replying on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub
9 Apr 2003, 7:55 AM
(bowing low) Please, I am most unworthy, you embarass me! What hey? Don't stop! (puts hat back on head, as should an Gentleman)
Thankyou oh panegyrical one!
you haven't the slightest clue.
'splain, lucy.
Intransit feels sorry he couldn't be blown up and become a dead hero......hahahaha......don't worry there's always n.korea....
What is this.....'NEVER BEEN TO THE DOCKS' syndrome?....0
This is what I meant bout Bob always surprising us.Bob I'll give u a 1 for inovation but keep tryin....u'll get the hang of poetry someday
Good thing u realised u never did have the 'fight' in u.......1
Sounds like a sentence challenge to pk.
spookie, chookie....under a haze.
Mellifluently told ! Remember when taking on board the sound advice and suggestions given be careful not to disrupt the poignanancy you have masterfully created in here. perfection is a bridge too far, but by golly its in sight. Well done my boy on a bloody fine poem 10
very nice bud, however not as inspirational as the blooding, but still as a concept piece, pretty damn fuckin fine.
Oh... Look... I've cried in my pants again, i swear.
I am a frustrated, angry little control freak. That is why.
this one's awkward:
Is there adequate oil
to supply the lanterns?
too many questions; yes must be the answer.
why must you always have it your way?
okay, the reason i think it has to be clarified is because it isthe first town you mention. but it does not work so well the way you have it now. i prefer the orginal stanza, as the comma'd one doesn't flow. maybe try:
Close your eyes
in London--Ontario's a blurred dream--
and awaken in Toronto
with your cold hands on my belly.
Where is Bob?......u have a customer Bob.....that'll be 10 bucks for Bob maam
Its hightime u followed my advice too before u end up writing crappy poems like the above. By the way most of the poets u like suck anyway.......ever heard of Ted Hughes,John Keats.......
No, no, no, no, no, no...
Yes. Yes, use that instead. :-)
How about 'Burning my nob'? No? Oh well...