good wordplay as ever great flow A few cliches near the end 'tangerine skies' and 'moon turns to rust' doesn't seem to mean anything. I dont think the poem would lose much if you binned them. As for dandelion fairies, a perfectly fair description.

Quit reading Calvin Trillin.

It is obvious that shadows feint, that is why they are shadows. I am not sure you need to tell the reader that. "fairies in dandelion’s" - what the hell are these. You cannot have realist images and throw these oddities in. It does not work. Even with some of the unabashedly overdramatic langue. "dry death of leaves" = again like the shadow image, there seems to be too much language here. The reader knows that dry leaves are obviously dead. Love is not a constant, "Love is an instant, And love favors the weak, They are the dreamers like me who weep" = you change the context with these lines into a telling montage, which comes off as some sort of didactical statement. What is the purpose of telling the reader these things? Why not let the poem show them without the author butting in and telling the reader how he feels. Engines purr? The end just rips into pure sap, which ultimately makes the poem fail, but with a rewrite and a lessing of tone and making the context clear (i.e. this is an adult flashing back at his first lost love? Only the Sycamore tree, which is a cliche, shows this. If it is an adult-to-adult relation then the Sycamore tree, which is a cliche, makes it seem young and trite). Sort out the context and maybe you will find the poem in here.

I forgot to ask... if I come across you doing this again sometime, what do I do?

I still haven't figured it out yet, dahling. Sorry.

Looks mostly excellent but I have some Q&A on this be back tomorrow.

Hey its Porkypig? why d'yah never vote an any of my stuff huh? This is cool pigface.

Very sweet, in a good way, but slightly over the top at the start. I have to go marketing right now but wanted to take a look, I'll be back later. I like it, lot's of simile and metaphor, my favorites, welcome back. I think you mean 'window' at the end.

I did find the picture of the American and British soldiers quite hilarious of them 'chilling' on may say in his palace smoking.

I hear the words on the streets to descibe this is LOL ? Well I'm astonished I never understood the lingo, a hearty hoo haa indeed.

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