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replying on Fix it by Nanshe
8 Apr 2003, 8:04 AM
a spoon for your sonnet, sir?
and never write another cliche?
sorry, that was harsh. i do like this piece, but it stands on the other side of over-used metaphor right now. you need to channel this, and make it more personal. reinvent the wheel. make the black bird green.
Knowing they were RIGHT, for god and country?
And large-breasted american women? And piss beer?
Have a 9 for creative knotting.
Thanks, I think.
What, did your bodyfriend wipe his dick on your face one time too many?
You just never stop writing, do you? Do you think that constant, unchecked writing is a sign of a) immense creativity b) a wild, untamed spirit c) being full to bursting with fresh, challenging ideas?
(I love it when he starts a b cing don't you?)
I haven't had a new idea in about 8 months. And the ones from 8 months ago were really just recycled from a year before that. And they were mostly stolen from TV.
This is a quality piece of writing. I'm sure you'll etc etc.
A pearl in a parable, for you, Sir:
Henri Matisse once overheard a man at a Salon critiquing one of his paper cuttings. The man was exclaiming at length at the outrageous price of the, in his opinion, childish simplicity of the artwork. He compared it at length to some of the complex and highly realistic oil paintings that must have taken days to complete. Exasperated, the man asked Matisse how long it had taken him to execute the "art." Matisse smiled and answered, "Sixty years."
This is the kind of thing that proves the point to my villanelle. Could be a new fave. The closing STOMPS!
Ummmm... Fun images but abstraction loses it's power when you can't follow the chord to a point.
By the way, it's = it is. It's = the one belonging to it. (last stanza)
Can you point me towards some of your more meaningful poems? I rather enjoy those.
meh.
GQTIP awarde. not that there's much competition tonight.
Yeah along those lines
here. don't say i never did nothing for you.
that's a fucking aneurysm my friend, totally unfixable. however you did a wonderful job complicating an uncomplicated and ancient structure (sonnets) and that's got to count for something somewhere. and the unaccessability of the piece? also, right off the fucking charts. Great job.
Now that's breaking some fucking wind. lol! asl???