lastobelus
on draft by daniella
12 Mar 2003, 11:47 AM
Oh, I like this. This is how I often feel about words, I feel like I want to punish the actual words themselves as if they had some punishable sentience.
nifty! (add "madly" to line 2 'n' it'd scan better)
thanks. :) I need a *#&$ job, period. :/
oh. a musician. that explains a lot. probably french, to boot.
mmm, yummy. This is one of the few poems I've ever read which made me wish there was a version on video.
no. metaphor for concentration and focus, disconnected and unaware of one's surroundings.
you're a very bad man.
i think i'll write you a poem.
while you are asleep?
Sawa. She's from washington, and energetic. She wrote a rhyming poem about cherry trees or something, 'n' someone posted "nonsense. Stop rhyming until you know what you're talking about" and they were quite right 'n' I posted an example (non-rhyming) poem that used an image or word from each corresponding line of hers, but that actually made sense as a whole. She sent me a bitter comment and then deleted all her poems :(
Well Done this is a grand poem, love the opening, ahhh opening I need one with my job 8
Hope you get what you want
bitches in heat ( great name for a rock band )
who'd you scare off, ?
'last breath of friendship' is a nice observation.
spare and sweet
Flip it he can rip it any style you want.
dreams AND nightmares. aint it da truth
How dare you blaspheme my fathers sacred girl!!! now twist and shout before I spring you carpeted. fred.