Garrett S Sexton
on Jack by MuDvAyNe
2 Mar 2003, 12:07 PM
Poor old Jack. A good limerick, but not yours. A 4
EXPECTED!
Garrett S Sexton
replying on Tribute to the greatest ever American poem by Garrett S Sexton
2 Mar 2003, 12:00 PM
I work quickly, thus sometimes error in the grammar. Cut me some slack! The pay is in the moment, pure flow with me.
I know this might sound strange, but I agree with you on this. I have stopped attempting to rhyme because a) I'm not very good at anything more than the basics of it, and b) I find that it restricts what I can and can't write about.
I think that what people have missed for the two long ones (Am I still here and Epistemology) is that they are meant to be light hearted poems that don't stick to the subject of love and death that I find so many people write about all the time-I do a lot but most of my stuff's crap so I don't submit it. I was surprised at this one cause it seemed quite good and I like it. But yes, I do see what you're saying. Thanks for the comment.
Good green kelp.
Michael Hutchinson Rocks!!!!!!!!!
That was swell.
Bill Z. Bub breaks into song:
"666 the Number of the Beast
666 the one for you and me"
-Iron Maiden, "The Number of the Beast"
Ah, nothing like the classics.
Hows about just ... "humility". what wouldja think o'that, Mr Pig?
"mra eht ma I"
-Little Man from Another Place
Hey gw! Thankyou a thousand times for your comments. A mild approval from you is precious to me, like tears of diamond that streak down my cheeks whilst eating "Death Rain" potato chips (Habanero flavour! xxxxx!) and reading a letter from my very first love, who I talked to on the phone again just this week. Oh where has the time gone, it has swirled away, but she's never changing, crystalline, her fragile defiance spears my abdomen with perfect playfulness.
Was there ever someone who brought you the greatest joy and the deepest despair simultaneously? Can this truly be that which is called "love"? Or is it merely my masochist mind?
..."this skin"..."this skin"... hmm. yes.
Where have I been? I've been busy surviving, working, searching, cleaning, being audited, trying to organize things in my new apartment, etc... the list is never ending, like the suffering of the world. And my computer crashed 3 times while trying to get onto Poemranker. Gah. "blow wind blow, wherever you may go, put on your overcoat and take me away, c'mon and take me on into the night, take me on into the night, blow me away..."
Ranger i've read some of your other works and although i respect your language and obvious intelligence sometimes when i'm reading your poetry i don't enjoy the piece at all because i'm so busy critiquing it as i go.
i have a just one piece of advice for you. stop trying to rhyme. anything. at all.
It was great until you used the word settle. 0 nah i must be fair 0!
Golden Q Tip. 10. Superb Edit.
Second stanza gave me a heart murmur.
kind of nice...a little sparse
Self~Portraits are always moving, at least to me.
Your second bingo came out only a bing which just won't do. we on;y drink orange bang.
"Brave to the bone,and smiling to the sleep" choice and smart.
"just like there beliefs" their would be better or not. nice poem pickle teeth.
Sorry to here about the scratch. I like telescopes.
Quite sweet 7
Good Show.
A POWERFUL STATEMENT INDEED. THE LAST LINE IS VERY SAD AND BUSH IS A TWAT.