You say in-escapable,but Harry had an uncle, and he escaped from Azkaban.I know it's only fiction,but well it was still amazing that he could do that. Then there is Buck Rogers,he got out of the 20th century.FUCKING A! Ron Weasley can fart,did you see Thunderpants. Im going to give you an 8

wow,it really gets to you doesnt it. NOT ME THOUGH, IM THE MTV GENERATION,LETS GET READY TO BURN,WOOHOO

This one doesnt work for me,even when i grasped it!

wow i cant imagine why anyone would give it an 8? they must of read it wrong...stupid blind idiots they are missing the point of this poem its so...full of ryming and thoughts and everything..YET ANOTHER 10

AHHH yet another 10 i wish i could write as half as good as you do..your poems are so expressive and meaningful..10 all the way

wow....one word wow..have you gotten any of these published? I really like them..Keep on writing..your poems compared to mine will definetly blow mine away i am only 12 and i love to write your poems inspire me to keep on writing no mater what people say..they belittle me and my work but after i have read thses nothing can put me down anymore another 10

wow this is so good not much of a variety though on ryming..it can be tough but cares and tears went perfect together so dramatic and it almost painted a scene in my mind about the part when it said sitting all alone on a quiet night and then waiting for someone to make it bright...sheer brillance to me..I give it a 10 because it explains how you feel and what you want and what you look for in a a girl..i really liked it and please keep amazing me with your work! this definetly deserves a 10 if i could vote anything higher it would definetly be alot higher

You've not quite grasped this, One thinks you should adapt it as a limerick, a nice idea but what the Dickens are you trying to say? Turn Back Dick Whittington. -6

Leave this be now my boy, write about something new, something thats inspiring then come back to this, you are trying too hard and its Saturday a young strapping lad like yourself must go to a public house and be merry.

I bet your wife found this simply charming. I would however relinquish the line 'in a soft summer breeze' it serves little purpose without a metaphor. I have just read some of your other work and was impressed but owe it to you to study and pass comment on at my earliest convenience. I wish yourself and your wife many happy years of matrimony.

One was amused.

Lose the title also, it ruins the whole shabang.

You have the beginnings of a sublime work let down only by an inconclusive ending. Now my dear boy try and focus on the ending, irony would fit like a golf glove. For example you detail most beautifully 'nature' and the representation of where you lost her (S1). What you need to do is carry that on taking that beauty then ending it most cruelly with the decadence of human nature. This needs to end in a crescendo of your sufferance, I feel one owes it to ones self to strive for perfection here as this metabolic potential to be a poets poem and that Sire if you are prepared to work on the end, would be a rare endorsement from myself...8

Possibly 'Silver assassin struck' for the last line, it seems to work and would take the syllables down to 17? I really like your haikus, you have much ability with images. 9

Nice. It's difficult to give advice on something as short as a haiku, especially when it's as good as this, so I'll limit myself to just saying "Nice".

50? Uch! Good poem but that's gross. Some one better warn the mechanic.