OneFingerAnswer
on sandbars by rompingcat
1 Mar 2003, 12:30 AM
Nice images with bad connections. The first stanza doesn't even seem to belong there.
I like it. Reminds me of myself not too long ago. Sweet. Innocent. Naive? Good luck. (6)
Get rid of 'then'int he last line otherwise perfect. 10
Where the hell have you been? I suffer through one more trial and no Lucifer to tempt me with his light. Lovely poem. 'Pea coat, stool-pigeon, cracked lips...' This poem is speaking to my twisted-up guts.
Last stanza, second line 'punctures this skin' try it, you'll like it.
help me I'm shrinking
I'm shrinking away
inking away
shrinking inking away
shrinkinink.
i before e.
what does it mean?
e after i,
this poem is fine.
in fact i think it may haunt my confined sleep tonight.
the mouth on the face of the man spitting blood,
breathing life and death by the fence...
brrrrrrrrr.
love h8 love h8
the massacre was self induced!
your mind is a fucking supernova
and the lense on my telescope has a scratch right across the middle.
punkrock.
teeters,
William Zanzibar Bubbington
Eight is my favorite number,
thankyou for all the kind words and encouragement. it means a lot to me at this juncture. By the way, I finally found "Gangbox" and am listening to "Growl" right now.
Fucking amazing! And after seeing your picture, I now believe everything you've ever said. Forgive this skeptic...
Now I shall do an magic tricke, and shrink into nothingness, walk away on molecules of atmosphere, smaller than a blood clot...
s.s.s.s..ss.so necessary so necessary so right on time in a blind taste test three out of five goatmen prefer the taste of hormone injected sugarcoated flax nuggets
Glad to see you back in the saddle.
Busy and active poem ya got here. Good thing they didnt dash out in front of you.
in case you don't get the voicemail, i'll call you tonight. can't do the 3pm thing tomorrow. groin pull? hmm.
Talent and likability are two entirely different things like vulva and cock, and cheetos and fritos salmon & pike, Jews and Genitiales.
HEY!!! you promised that that would be "our little secret"!
you big jerk!!
(heheheh! i made a pun.)
Great haiku Tony, sorry i've been healing from a groin pull these last three days. i've read it, and i would like to have a phone meeting about it with you 12:00 my time 3:00 yours tomorrow if possible. I think we are good to go. Great revisions, and way to sink the magic bullit. 10.
we'll have a garage sale and listen to songs for the apocalypse.
well, my old pal, i see what you are saying here, and i'll not lend you my box matches, nor let you siphon my gasoline!!! i may need them myself, and nothing makes me happier than a gigantic FIRE!!!!!
yah, okay, fine. you make me wet. there.
This has got to be the lamest reject metal song since Twisted Wizard. Fabio Lione could totally kick your ass.
Blahblahblah. i'm a better pornographer than you, so there.Yonic 0.
i changed my mind
screw dis